Youjeong Choi
It's getting warmer. Soon, spring is coming. My favourite weather is Spring. I do like it! Many kind of flower blossom in Korea. The most famous flower is cherry blossom. Many festival of cherry blossom has been held throughout the country. The most well-known festival is held in Jinhea. I've been to there once. It was so beautiful... I'd like to go there again in this spring, but Jinhea is so far from my town... when I went to that festival, I took a bus for 10 hours! It's terrible distance... After earning money, I'll go to there by train(expensive and fast train!!)
2015년 3월 4일 오후 7:12
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It's getting warmer.

Soon, spring is will be coming. My favourite weather season is Spring. I do like it!
Many kinds of flowers blossom in Korea. The most famous flower is the cherry blossom. Many festival of cherry blossom festivals has are held throughout the country. The most well-known festival is held in Jinhea. I've been to there once. It was so beautiful...
I'd like to go there again in this spring, but Jinhea is so far from my town... when I went to that festival, I took a bus for 10 hours! It's terrible distance... After earning money, I'll go to there by train (an expensive and fast train!!)

 

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Great narrative- I enjoyed reading it!  I only added a few corrections/suggestions.

2015년 3월 4일
@missymarie753 haha come here. It's so wonderful than you think.
2015년 3월 5일
see now you have me wanting to go to a cherry blossom festival.
2015년 3월 4일
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