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My home town I lived in a small village when I was a child. It was a very beautiful place where I could hear birds singing and smell flower scent when I woke up in the morning. After school, I used to play games with my friends in my house yard. When sun gradually fell down, we could smell the delicious food from the kitchen and hear mothers called their children back for super. When I grew up, I moved to big cities in order to have better education. However, my beautiful home town came to my dream from time to time. I missed her so much.
2015년 9월 1일 오전 1:07
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My hometown

I lived in a small village when I was a child. It was a very beautiful place where I could hear birds singing and smell flowers scent when I woke up in the morning. After school, I used to play games with my friends in my house yard. When the sun gradually fell down, we could smell the delicious food from the kitchen and hear mothers calling their children back for supper. When I grew up, I moved to big cities in order to have a better education. However, my beautiful home town came to me in my dreams from time to time. I missed her so much. (better: I missed <em>it</em> so much)

 

Excellent writing overall! There were really only a few minor mistakes.

Your hometown sounds like a wonderful place.

2015년 9월 10일
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