Cristobal
Travel Traveling is one of the greatest sources well-being, you may change and enjoy very much, Simply the best. What do you think?
2015년 9월 1일 오후 2:15
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Travel

Traveling is one of the greatest sources of well-being, and you may change and enjoy it very much. Traveling is simply the best.

What do you think?

 

Notes about my edits: look how I put a conjunction after the first idea - that helps the reader see you have a new thought/idea approaching. The second idea uses a pronoun -it - to refer to 'traveling'. That last idea was missing both a noun (the subject) and the verb (the action). 

2015년 9월 1일
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