Rodrigo Bustos
About my Hi My name is Rodrigo, actuallity i living in Cusco, but i´m chilean. i´m here because i work for a ONG, my works is about children in vulnerability. Next year i´m travel to england and a want learn english, my wish is talk with somebody something, maybe for skype o similar. I hope any of you be interesting!! good day to you all
2015년 10월 14일 오전 12:26
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About my

Hi
My name is Rodrigo, actuallity i living in Cusco, but i´m chilean. i´m here because i work for a ONG, my works is about children in vulnerability. Next year i´m travel to england and a want learn english, my wish is talk with somebody something, maybe for skype o similar.
I hope any of you be interesting!!
good day to you all

Very good effort, Rodrigo! I hope you don't mind if I offer a few general suggesions to improve your writing. 

1. For now, I urge you to write shorter sentences. For example, you could write: My name is Rodrigo. I live in Cusco, but I'm actually Chilean.

2. In English, we say NGO, instead of ONG. Also, due to the vowel sound at the beginning of "En-Jee-Oh" (NGO), we write the indefinite article "an" (instead of "a") before the acronym. So you would write: I'm here because I work for an NGO.

3. Do not forget to capitalize proper adjectives, as well as proper nouns. Countries, cities, and nationalities are always capitalized. For example, we write: England, London, and English. Also, Skype should be capitalized because it is a name. Finally, the first person singular pronoun (I) should be capitalized.

 4. The infinitive form of a verb doesn't directly follow another verb in English. In Spanish, I believe you could say, "<em>Quiero preguntarte.</em>" In English, however, the translation of <em>pregunta</em>r is to ask. We need this extra word between the verbs. So, we say: "I want to ask you for a favor." In your case, you could say, I want to learn English.

5. There is a difference between interesting and interested. They both function as adjectives, but they are used very differently. Something that is interesting attracts your interest. For example: That is an interesting notebook entry about Rodrigo's work in Cusco. (It was the <em>notebook entry</em> that attracted my interest.) The word interested, on the other hand, describes how a person feels, and we don't necessarily know what <em>causes</em> or <em>attracts</em> that feeling of interest. For example, I could write: I am very interested in Rodrigo's work in Cusco. Or, you could say, I am interested in finding a conversation partner.

<em>I hope this was helpful. Best wishes to you!</em>

 

 

 

2015년 10월 14일

About my me

Hi 

My name is Rodrigo, right noe I am actuallity i living in Cusco, but I'm chilean. I'm here because I work for a ONG, my works is on about children in vulnerability  (I don't understand this part). Next year I'm traveling to England and a want to learn English, my wish is to talk with somebody using something, maybe for Skype osomething similar.
I hope any of you be interesting!!

Contact me if you are interested. 


Good day to you all

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