This Modern Life
The picture shows that in modern life,computers have been a must,people work with computer,play with computer, use computer at home,and even dream about computer when they sleep.
Computer is a sign of modern life,however,is this kind of life good for our heath? Obviously using computer too much does much harm than good. Firstly,in recent years more and more people were dead of overworking with computers,there is 1 person died of overworking at HUAWEI on average. Secondly,computers create much radiation,it has proved that plants near a computer grow not well than others far away from computers.
To sum up,people can not live this kind of modern life. In addition to computers,there are many other heathy living styles,we should keep a balance in using computers.
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This Modern Life.
The picture shows that in modern life, computers have been a must. People work with computers, play with computers, use computers at home and even dream about computers when they sleep.
Computers are a sign of modern life but is this kind of life good for our heath? Obviously using computers too much does more harm than good. Firstly, in recent years more and more people have died from using computers too much. Even 1 person has died at HUAWEI due to using a computer too much. Secondly, computers create lots of radiation. It has been proven that plants near a computer don't grow as well than others far away from computers.
To sum up, people can not live this kind of modern life. In addition to computers, there are many other heathy living styles. We should keep a balance in using computers.
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