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Kartika sari
Korea is my dream country My name is kartika. I'm come from Indonesia a biggest country in the world. I'm very interest of Korea all about that country. I love and really want to go there because Korea have a beautiful country in my oponion, the coulture i love very much, i learn little about korean language from the drama, reality show etc. I think Korea have a magnet to pull tourist to go there. And i hope someday can go there to enjoying that cool country!!!
2015년 12월 26일 오후 3:17
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Korea is My Dream Country

 

My name is Kartika. I come from Indonesia, one of the biggest countries in the world. I'm very interested in Korea - all about the country. I love and really want to go there because Korea is a beautiful country in my opinion. I love the country very much, I'm learning a little about the Korean language from dramas, reality shows, etc. I think Korea has a magnet pulling tourists to go there. And I hope someday I can go there to enjoy that cool country!!! 

 

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I love Korea too ^^;;

My only comment is that you use the word "country" too much, so it starts to sound weird. Good job though! :)

2015년 12월 26일
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