Eklavya - The Unsung Hero from Mahabharata

Acharya Drona had given Arjuna the promise that he would make him Arjuna the best archer in the world. Arjuna was the favourite student of Drona. One day, Drona decided to move into the forest along with his students. His dog, who was barking all the way, also accompanied him, who was barking all the way [You can also say "He was accompanied by his dog, who was barking all the way."]. The dog was some distance ahead of the others and everyone could hear him barking. All of a sudden, his barking stopped and he seemed to be running backwards. Acharya stopped the dog and observed him. To his astonishment, he found that the dog had his mouth full of five arrows due to which he couldn't bark. The arrows were fired by someone with such dexterity that none of them had caused any injury to the dog. Acharya thought that this could only be achieved by someone who had achieved greatest skills in archery and even Arjuna would be no match for such a person.

All of them moved forward in search of the archer. After walking some distance, Drona found a statue made up of clay which resembled his own frame and a young boy was meditating in front of that statue. When all of them got near that boy, he woke up from his meditation. When he saw Drona, he leaned forward and touched Drona's feet to seek his blessings. Drona blessed him and asked, "Who are you, young boy? And what are you doing here all alone? Did you fire that those arrows?" The boy said, "Yes Master! I had to do that as the dog was interrupting my meditation. I am sorry." He continued, "I am Eklavya. I wanted to learn archery from you, but it was not possible for me. So, I made your statue and I tried my best to learn archery in front of your statue. Master, it is actually you who taught me this much skills in archery."

Acharya Drona was very pleased with the young boy's efforts. However, at the same time, he realized that Arjuna was no match for this boy. Out of his blind love for Arjuna, he came up with a devious plan. He told Eklavya, "Young boy! I am pleased with your passion for learning. So, do you consider me as your true master?" Eklavya replied, "Yes Master! I do, of course." Drona continued, "Then you are indebted to me and I want you to repay your debt right now. I want your right thumb as my debt." As soon as Eklavya heard this, he pulled a knife from his waistband and cut down his right thumb and offered it to Drona. Drona stood dumbstruck after seeing this. He felt sorry for the poor boy. This is how Eklavya was denied of the right of being the greatest archer in the world just to fulfill Arjuna's desire.

Good job! However, you seem to have trouble with spacing when writing dialogues. Here are some tips:

If you are writing the action before the quote, you need to put a space <em>after </em>the comma, but do not space after the quotation mark.

He asked,"Who are you?" [no space at all] << not correct

He asked," Who are you?" [space after the quotation mark] << not correct

He asked, "Who are you?" [space after comma, but no space after quotation mark] << correct!!!

If you are writing the action after the quote, just put a space after the quotation mark.

"Who are you?"he asked. << not correct
"Who are you? "he asked. << not correct
"Who are you?" he asked. << correct!!!

I hope that helps clear up some confusions. Basically, the quotation marks (" ") should always be attached to whatever the character is saying.