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08/03 Today I was busy but I didn't have a class in my University. On morning, I studied my book "Generation of business models Before I have gone with my couple to eat. We have ate a paella. It's typical in my city. I live in Valencia) On afternoon I went to gym. Normally, I went two hours because I gone bycicle and musculation. I gone 4 days per week Before I needed bananas but I didn't have money. When I arrived at home, I have gone to supermarket. Now, I am studying English. I am practising my writing

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hello! apparently have one day busy... remember take one moment of the day and enjoy of the life because the time is eternal and infinity but the life short and fast.... take care...
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08/03

Today, I was busy, but (better: although) I didn't have a class at my University.

In the morning, I studied my book (better: textbook) "Generation of Business Models".
Before that, I went with a couple (my couple = my parents, my friends, ...?) to eat.
We have ate a paella. It's common in my city. I live in Valencia.

In the afternoon, I went to the gym.
Normally, I go for two hours because I ride bicycle and lift weights (I think this is what you meant?). I go 4 days a week

Earlier, I needed bananas, but I didn't have money.
When I arrived at home, I went to the supermarket.

Now, I am studying English. I am practising my writing.

*** Two things to focus on:

1) Practice past tense a bit more. "I have gone" is rather uncommon in English, and in most of this passage "I went" was the simplest and most correct way to phrase it.

2) When discussing a part of the day (morning, evening, afternoon), use the prepositional "in". "On" works when you're talking about a day of the week (e.g. Monday, Tuesday, etc.). "At" is the most common way to describe a very specific time (e.g. at 5, at 6, at noon). Use "in" for months (e.g. in April, in May). Unfortunately, I can't point you to a rule for this. Prepositions are completely random, and the only thing you can do is memorise them. 

Good luck!

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08/03

Today I was busy and I didn't have a class in my University.

In the morning, I studied my book "Generation of business models"
Before I have gone with my couple(?) to eat.
We have ate a paella. It's typical in my city, Valencia.

In the afternoon I went to a/the gym.
Normally, I go there for two hours because I bicycle and do weights. I go there for 4 days per week

Before I needed bananas but I didn't have any money.
When I arrived home, I went to the supermarket.

Now, I am studying English. I am practising my writing

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