Correct the next sentences, please.
A child with various backgrounds, such as a child who is going to go back to Japan in the future although he/she lives abroad on account of parents' work, a child who is going to settle in overseas permanently, a child who has two or three nationality by an international marriage, and a child does not have Japanese nationality does the experience admission.
親の仕事の都合で国外に住んでいるが将来は日本へ帰国する予定の子供、海外に永住予定の子供、国際結婚で二重や三重国籍の子供、日本国籍を持たない子供など様々な背景を持つ者が体験入学をする。
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Correct the next sentences, please.
A child with various backgrounds, for example, a child who is going to return to Japan in the future although they live abroad on account of their parents' work, a child who is going to settle overseas permanently, a child who has two or three nationalities because of an international marriage, and a child who does not have Japanese nationality does the experience admission.親の仕事の都合で国外に住んでいるが将来は日本へ帰国する予定の子供、海外に永住予定の子供、国際結婚で二重や三重国籍の子供、日本国籍を持たない子供など様々な背景を持つ者が体験入学をする。
There are some difficult points here.
I have changed "such as" to "for example." The first is more informal than the second and this sounds a formal piece of writing.
"Return" I feel is better than "go back." Once again it's a little more formal.
I have used "they" and "their" although the child is singular. It is considered acceptable nowadays.If you do not want to identify the subject's gender (for example -accusations of sexism) it is acceptable to use the plural "they" rather than the "he or she" or "he /she" which can become tedious in a long article.
Finally, I have not corrected anything after the word "nationality" because I am not sure what it means. At the moment it does not make sense. It probably needs reworded.
I hope this helps.
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Thank you. Best wishes.
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Thank you for your kindness. Though I had a knowledge about it, I made the mistake. I read your self introduction(teaching English literature and language at a local high school) at italki site. I got it. You are indeed a professional teacher.
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My apologies. I missed something. See the words "marriage, and." There is a comma between them. This is incorrect. If you use "and" you do not use a comma. It should read "marriage and." When you are listing things you use a comma in place of "and." Therefore it is not needed when you actually use "and."
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