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Some thought about losing weight It's really hot these days for us Chinese girls to lose weight and to be really slim even when we are not over weight at all,and I was one of them.After all the starvation,the torture of over exercise,the gorge,I began to think,why the hell do we need to look like a piece of paper,how is that can be called beauty?And after all this,I started to think about true beauty,and the quality of life.I think it's better to lead a healthy life and have a good eating habit,and find what really interests us and strive for it,and those are the true important,rather than live in other people's "standard of beauty" or "standard of a successful life".

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Some thoughts about losing weight

It's really hard these days for Chinese girls* to lose weight and to be really slim even when we are not over weight at all and I was one of them. After all the starvation, the torture of over-exercise, the gorges, I began to think why the hell do we need to look like a piece of paper? How can that be called 'beauty'? And after all this, I started to think about true beauty, and the quality of life. I think it's better to lead a healthy life and have a good eating habit, and to find out what really interests us and strive for it, and those are the truly important, rather than live with other people's "standard of beauty" or "standard of a successful life".

*the 'us' has been skipped because later you write '.. and I was one of them'.

Very well written!

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