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fifth try Last December my girlfriend and me decided to spend our winter holidays in Lapland. After Reading some reviews on the internet we booked a cottage next to the line of the polar circle. The house was really beautiful and welcoming. It was completely made of wood and perfectly decorated with christmas ornaments. The furniture was also wooden and ceilings really high with beams. It had two bedrooms, one of them had an extremely comfortable double bed. There were two well equipped bathrooms an one huge living room with a fireplace. The house had also two barns outside, the biggest one was a wood store and was shared with two other cottages, the other one was a private smoke sauna. When we booked the cottage the recepcionist ask us if we preferred a house with traditional smoke sauna for and extra charge. We both love sauna so we decided to try the traditional kind. Although we found out this sort of sauna was harder to set off, it was definetly worth it. In spite of the house was advertised as being 10 minutes from the ski resort, we had to rent a snow-mobile to do it in such a short time. At first, we were dissapointed because the renting was quiet expensive, however after the first ride we found it really thrill. If you like snow and winter sports do not miss the opportunity to spend a holidays in a wooden cottage in Lapland. Despite fees are high, living in such welcoming house with a fireplace and private sauna is an amazing experience.

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fifth try

Last December my girlfriend and I decided to spend our winter holidays in Lapland. After reading some reviews on the internet we booked a cottage next to the (line of the polar circle.)  Perhaps Arctic Circle would sound better? 

The house was really beautiful and welcoming. It was completely made of wood and perfectly decorated with Christmas ornaments. The furniture was also wooden and the ceilings were really high with beams. It had two bedrooms, one of them had an extremely comfortable double bed. There were two well equipped bathrooms and  one huge living room with a fireplace. The house also had also two barns outside, the biggest one was a wood store and was shared with two other cottages, the other one was a private smoke sauna.
When we booked the cottage the receptionist  asked us if we preferred a house with traditional smoke sauna for and extra charge. We both love saunas  so we decided to try the traditional kind. Although we found out this sort of sauna was harder to light, it was definitely  worth it.

Although the house was advertised as being 10 minutes from the ski resort, we had to rent a snowmobile to do it in such a short time. At first, we were disappointed because the renting was quite expensive, however after the first ride we found it really  a thrill.
If you like snow and winter sports do not miss the opportunity to spend a holidays in a wooden cottage in Lapland. Despite high fees, living in such a welcoming house with a fireplace and private sauna is an amazing experience.


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fifth try

Last December my girlfriend and me I decided to spend our winter holidays in Lapland. After reading some reviews on the internet we booked a cottage next to the line of the polar arctic circle.

The house was really beautiful and welcoming. It was completely made of wood and perfectly decorated with Christmas ornaments. The furniture was also wooden and the ceilings really high with beams. It had two bedrooms, one of them had an extremely comfortable double bed. There were two well equipped bathrooms and one huge living room with a fireplace. The house had also had two barns outside, the biggest one was a wood store and was shared with two other cottages, the other one was a private smoke sauna.
When we booked the cottage the receptionist asked us if we preferred a house with traditional smoke sauna for and extra charge. We both love sauna so we decided to try the traditional kind. Although we found out this sort of sauna was harder to set off, it was definitely worth it.

In spite of the house was being advertised as being 10 minutes from the ski resort, we had to rent a snow-mobile to do it in such a short time. At first, we were disappointed because the renting rental was quiet expensive, however after the first ride we found it really a thrill (or really thrilling).
If you like snow and winter sports do not miss the opportunity to spend a holidays in a wooden cottage in Lapland. Despite Although fees are high, living in such a welcoming house with a fireplace and private sauna is an amazing experience.


Great stuff Mario. Sounds wonderful. My corrections are in red and my suggestions to sound more natural are in blue/grey.

"In spite of the house was being advertised" - You could also say "In spite of the fact the house was advertised"

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