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I wanna go to Australia!! Today, I writing about the reason of I wanna go to Australia. Because I wanna experience the summer Christmas. Australia is in the Southern Hemisphere so Japan and Australia has opposite seasons. So Australian santa claus wearing a T-shirt. I'm sure it's so cute!! And I think it's so amazing that the season is reversed by countries. So I wanna go to Australia in order to experience that.
2016년 9월 15일 오전 11:45
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I want to go to Australia!! [note: "wanna" is spoken, but "want to" is the typical written form.]

Today, I am writing about the reason why I want to go to Australia.
I want to go to Australia because I want to experience Christmas in the summer. ["because" cannot start a sentence. "Because" starts a dependent clause, which means that the clause cannot stand alone. It becomes a sentence when you start with "I want to .... because"] 
Australia is in the Southern Hemisphere so Japan and Australia have opposite seasons. (has = singular, Have = plural) 
So, the Australian Santa Claus wears a T-shirt. I'm sure it's so cute!! (names, like Santa Claus, are Proper Nouns meaning they must be capitalized)
And I think it's so amazing that  season is reversed by countries.the countries have reversed seasons!
So I want to go to Australia in order to experience that.

Overall-- the passage can easily be understood. Vocabulary is particularly good. Nice! :)

2016년 9월 15일
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