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Diary-98 (I Will Start Fresh) I haven’t written diary about half a month, my English is rusty, so there are a lot of grammar mistakes in my diary. I was study hard in the past falf a month for a stiff examination, and the examination has a special value. I will start fresh, because the examination was over tomorrow, because I have a new goal, that is I determined to peruse the postgraduate study, my research interests include journalism and communications. By the way, I do love English, English is my hoped career. My dear friends, I need you help. Thank you for your time.

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Diary-98 (I Will Start Fresh)

I haven’t written a diary entry for about half a month, my English is rusty, so there are a lot of grammar mistakes in my diary.

I was studying hard in the past falf a month for half a month for a stiff tough examination, and the examination has a holds special value.

I will start afresh, because the examination was will be over tomorrow, (Was is past tense, tomorrow is the future, was can never work with tomorrow because tomorrow hasnt happened!) because so I have a new goal, that is,  I am determined to peruse the postgraduate study, my research interests include journalism and communications.

By the way, I do love English, English is my hoped career (English is not a career it is a language. You can say something like I hope to have a career teaching English, English is important to my career, my career involes using English, I hope to have a career where I will use English etc etc, But English is not a hoped for career, it is a language you might need for a career .)  My dear friends, I need your help.

Thank you for your time.
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Diary-98 (I Will Start Fresh)

I haven’t written a diary about two weeks, so my English are rusty.   I expect  there will be a lot of grammar mistakes in my diary.

I've been studying hard in the past falf a month for a tough and important examination.

Now I will start fresh, because the examination will be over tomorrow.   I have a new goal.  I'm determined to persue the postgraduate study.   My research interests include journalism and communications.

By the way, I do love English.  English will be a big part of my future career. My dear friends, I need you're help.

Thank you for your time.


A half a month is two weeks.  Actually I think it's been > over a month.
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The examination was over yesterday. This is my mistake.

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