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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society.
Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Every child needs to be taught how to be a good person in a society. While some argue that they should learn this from school, I believe parent uphold a much more important role in guiding their children to be a good members of society.
There is no doubt that school acts as a mini society in which we are trained to behave in certain ways in order to avoid punishment or receive positive reinforcement. We submit homework on time, listen to our teacher and do not use violence to solve problem because we do not want to get in trouble. School sets out a very clear and organized rules or systems for children to follow and learn how to behave. In addition, there are lots of vivid and true experiences from their classmates or friends that if they fail to obey some school rule, they would end up having very bad consequences. Therefore, children will be conditioned over time at school and have better idea to be self-disciplined.
However, I also believe that parents play more significant roles in shaping their children to become a decent person at a higher standard. Parents have more time to be with their children than our schoolteachers. They can teach their children what other essential moral values they should uphold. For instance, they should contribute, and be kind and caring to others. They may also share and discuss past experience with their kids, so they understand the rationale behind holding those moral value. Guiding their children to deal with difficult situation is another way to teach their children what a good person should act like.
In conclusion, parents have much more influence than school in shaping their kids to be a good member of society.
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Can someone help me to correct this article? Thanks :)
Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society.Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Every child needs to be taught how to be a good person in a society. While some argue that they should learn this from school, I believe parents uphold a much more important role in guiding their children to be a good members of society.
There is no doubt that school acts as a mini society in which we are trained to behave in certain ways in order to avoid punishment or receive positive reinforcement. We submit homework on time, listen to our teacher and do not use violence to solve problems because we do not want to get in trouble. School sets out very clear and organized rules or systems for children to follow and learn how to behave. In addition, there are lots of vivid and true experiences from their classmates or friends that if they fail to obey some school rule, they will end up having very bad consequences. Therefore, children will be conditioned over time at school and have better idea to be self-disciplined.
However, I also believe that parents play a more significant role in shaping their children to become decent people at higher standards. Parents have more time to be with their children than our schoolteachers. They can teach their children what other essential moral values they should uphold. For instance, they should contribute, and be kind and caring to others. They may also share and discuss past experience with their kids, so they understand the rationale behind holding those moral value. Guiding their children to deal with difficult situations is another way to teach their children what a good person should act like.
In conclusion, parents have much more influence than school in shaping their kids to be a good member of society.
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Can someone help me to correct this article? Thanks :)
Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society.Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Every child needs to be taught how to be a good person in a society. While some argue that they should learn this from school, I believe parents uphold a much more important role in guiding their children to be a good members of society.
There is no doubt that school acts as a mini society in which we are trained to behave in certain ways in order to avoid punishment or receive positive reinforcement. We submit homework on time, listen to our teacher and do not use violence to solve problem because we do not want to get in trouble. School sets out a very clear and organized rules or systems for children to follow and learn how to behave. In addition, there are lots of vivid and true experiences from their classmates or friends that if they fail to obey some school rule, they would end up having very bad consequences. Therefore, children will be conditioned over time at school and have better idea to be self-disciplined.
However, I also believe that parents play more significant roles in shaping their children to become a decent person at a higher standard. Parents have more time to be with their children than our schoolteachers. They can teach their children what other essential moral values they should uphold. For instance, they should contribute, and be kind and caring to others. They may also share and discuss past experience with their kids, so they understand the rationale behind holding those moral value. Guiding their children to deal with difficult situations is another way to teach their children what a good person should act like.
In conclusion, parents have much more influence than school in shaping their kids to be a good member of society.
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