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Could you please correct my task 1 IELTS writing? The line graph illustrates the amount of electricity units needed daily in every house in England in winter and summer while the pie chart reveals four sections describing the main methods by which the electricity is used in every household. It is clear from the graph that the maximum amount of electricity used is recorded at approximately 45000 unit which has been used in winter between 21 and 24 hours everyday. Whereas the least amount of electricity units recorded in winter is slightly over 30000 which is recorded between 6 and 9 hours. On the other hand, as shown by the graph the summit of electricity used is 20000 between 12 and 15 hours while the the least amount of electricity units used is 12000 at 9 hours. As illustrated by the pie chart, the most common cause of electricity consumption is by heating rooms and heating water amounted to 52.5%. Whereas the most common cause is ovens, kettles and washing machines, and the percentage of electricity consumed by "lighting, tv,radio" and "vacuum cleaners, food mixers, electric tools" is the same accounted for 15%. To sum it up, the demand of electricity in winter is greater than in summer in England, consequently the predominant cause of electricity consumption is through heating rooms and water as shown by the chart.

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Could you please correct my task 1 IELTS writing?

The line graph illustrates a number of electricity units needed daily in every house in England in winter and summer while the pie chart reveals four sections describing the main methods by which the electricity is used in every household.

It is clear from the graph that the maximum amount of electricity used is recorded at approximately 45000 unit which has been used in winter between 21 and 24 hours every day. Whereas the least amount of electricity units recorded in winter is slightly over 30000 which is recorded between 6 and 9 hours. On the other hand, as shown by the graph the summit of electricity used is 20000 between 12 and 15 hours while the the least amount of electricity units used is 12000 at 9 hours.

As illustrated by the pie chart, the most common cause form of electricity consumption is by heating rooms and heating water, amounted amounting to 52.5%. Whereas the most common cause form is ovens, kettles and washing machines. and t The percentage of electricity consumed by "lighting, tv, radio" and "vacuum cleaners, food mixers, electric tools" is the same accounted accounting for 15%.

To sum it up, the demand of for electricity in winter is greater than in summer in England, consequently, the predominant cause of electricity consumption is through heating rooms and water as shown by the chart.

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