Literature writing
In my opinion, writing literature is the art of making life like music the art of making pleasure.
So, if you write without listening to the music of your soul flowing out to your fingertips, it's like someone touring the world lonely, without companionship.
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Literature writing Writing literature
Literature writing Writing literature is, in my opinion, the art of making life like music, the art of making pleasure. So, if you write without listening to the music of your soul flowing even to touch your fingers, it's like someone touring the world lonely, without companionship.---
*flowing even to touch your fingers -- this isn't wrong, though you might be more clear if you say "flowing out through your fingers" or "flowing out to your fingertips" or something like that.
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A lovely thought!
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Literature writing
Writing literature is, in my opinion the art of making life. like music the art of making pleasure . So if you write without listening to the music of your soul flowing out to your fingertips, it's like someone touring the world lonely without any companionship.1
Literature writing
Writing literature, is in my opinion is the art of making life. Like music is the art of making pleasure. So, if you write without listening to the music of your soul flowing out to your fingertips, it's like someone touring the world; lonely and without companionship.0
Thanks Betsy for your comment and supportive words.
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Great work, Kareem! It is a beautiful and expressive statement! Randi provided a thoughtful and thorough correction. I'll just add a few observations: 1) We rely heavily on punctuation to clarify meaning in written English, so please take note of Randi's use of commas, in particular; 2) A phrase such as "in my opinion" can go at the beginning of the sentence, too (followed by a comma, of course!); and 3) Your use of "lonely" seems appropriate here; just for your information, however, "lonely" describes an emotional state, whereas "alone" describes a physical state. Again, it is a lovely piece of writing. Mabrook! :)
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