我的家乡。

我的中学关了因为它是座很不好的学院。

你好 Chris:

你的内容可以让读者理解但是要注意语序。

The content is comprehensible for Chinese reader but the word order is not well-structured.

1. "subject + verb + object" is the basic structure in Mandarin as in English but language chunk should be rearranged for longer sentences; which normally as following:

"subject + verb + time (including adv.) /(measure words e.g 个／只）＋ place + object/complement"

e.g 我在这儿住差不多十二年了 or 住了差不多十二年; the highlight sentence means it's still ongoing, you have been living here for almost 12 years.  

the highlight sentence means it's still ongoing, "you have been living here for almost 12 years. "

the second sentence "住了差不多十二年", the audience would assume you had lived here for almost 12 years but probably not anymore.

e.g 我们过去叫一个在Catford的街

2."酒吧街比三里屯不一样" sounds weird to native Mandarin speaker because 

****you can simply say 酒吧街和/与三里屯不一样 

****BUT if you are trying to say "comparing with "三里屯", "酒吧街" is very different "'' then is more common to use ”比起来“ and the usage "比起来" is different than using it as "比“ e.g "他比她高“； "妹妹比姐姐漂亮,". Because "起来” means the state had started and it's continuous.  These two cities are always going to be very different in comparison. 3. “的” can be used

***as "possessive"

e.g "郊区的中心“; "我的家乡“

or ***** functions as an adjective 

e.g 很大的； 很不好的

Thank you for sharing your hometown with us. Hope this helps, should you have more questions, let me know! 

Regards,

Sarah 

我的家乡。

Maybe a better sentence order, see below.

我的家乡叫Catford，在伦敦郊区。这个郊区之所以叫Catford是因为郊区的中心有一个很大的猫雕像。我在这里住了差不多十二年。

Catford 没有很多商店但是有酒吧，离我们不远有一个“酒吧街”。酒吧街和三里屯不一样。

我的家乡有一个图书馆，图书馆的附近有我的中学。我的中学现在已经关闭了，它并不是很好的学院（学校）。