Five sentences heart. Can you correct and explain my mistakes? Thanks
Heart is a vital organ which perform important functions in our body. More and more people are suffering from cardiovascular diseases. Many of diseases are preventable if people would follow the following recommendation.
First of all, no smoking at all. Moderate consumption of alcohol. Secondly, be physically active and avoid stress. To reduce the salt intake and be fit.
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Five sentences about the heart. Can you correct and explain my mistakes? Thanks
The heart is a vital organ which performs important functions in our body. More and more people are suffering from cardiovascular diseases. Many of these diseases are preventable if people would follow the following recommendations.First of all, no smoking at all. Moderate consumption of alcohol. Second (we would generally use second rather than secondly), be physically active and avoid stress. Reduce salt intake and be fit (maybe say "exercise more" instead of "be fit").
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