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First notebook entry: Introducing myself Every language is the door to another world, so, I started with English, i would like to perceive this part of our world...

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First notebook entry: Introducing myself

Every language is a door into another world, so I started with English because i would like to perceive this part of our world...


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First notebook entry: Introducing myself

Every language is the door to another world, so I started with English because I would like to perceive this part of our world...

Hi Mari!

Every language is the door to another world, and I've started with English as the first new world I will enter....

Your sentence is called a "run-on sentence" because it combines too many thoughts without a conjunction!  You need "... so I started with English BECAUSE I would like...", or you could make a new sentence starting "I would like to perceive..."

Also, I've changed the style of your sentence just a bit to create more internal harmony... I hope you won't mind!!! :-))  For example: another world = new world; door = enter; if you see what I mean!  And I've changed "would like" to "will" because it's in your power to do it... you're not needing anyone's permission and you can use the more forceful word!!! :-))

I hope all that helps and makes sense to you!!!
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