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Shopping Online Today, shopping online is seemed as a fasion in youngers. Actually, since its benifits, more and more people begin to accept this trade style, not only (by?)the youngers. Why does shopping online is so popular? I think it's because shopping online really brings us many benifits. Firstly, shopping online is much convincer than other tradition shopping ways. We can almostly buy all of the commoditis all over the world just at home! What we only need do is just to click your mouse and press your keyboard! Secondly, commoditis online are always much cheaper than that in real shops. However, shopping online has its shortages.Firstly, the quality of the commoditis online are not always ensurance. We don't know the true quality of the commodity, as we don't know whether its looking is the same as the picutue on the website. Secondly, which is more serious, the trade online are not really security enough. We hear illegal cases of online-trade every a period of time. My suggestion about shopping online is that shopping online is benifit for us, but we should know how to protect ourselves when we trade online.

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Shopping Online

Today, shopping online seems to be a fashion among younger people. Actually, because of its benefits, more and more people are beginning to accept this  way to trade, not only (or not just) the younger people .
Why is shopping online so popular? I think it's because shopping online really brings us many benefits.

Firstly, shopping online is much convincer more convenient than other traditional ways of shopping. We can buy almost all of the commodities from all over the world from home! All you need to do is just click your mouse and press your keyboard!

Secondly, commodities online are always much cheaper than they are in the shops.


However, shopping online has its disadvantages.

Firstly, the quality of online commodities (online commodities is better than the commodities online) are not always assured. We don't know the true quality of the commodity, as we don't know whether its appearance is the same as in the picutue on the website.

Secondly, which is more serious, the trade online online trading is not really secure enough. We hear cases of illegal online-trading every so often.


My suggestion about shopping online is that shopping online is beneficial for us, but we should know how to protect ourselves when we trade online. (good final sentence)

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我要能写成这样足以呵呵
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写的不错嘿嘿,观点跟我的差不多
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没错,练练哈
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昨天的四级题目啊啊!!!

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