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Making a new friend Today I went for an interview.As I walked into elevator. A girl steped into the elevator at the same time . Then I asked her :"are you a teacher here?"she replied she is the interviewer .

We were call for having this interview together. As she was interviewing . I got to know she already have had four years teaching experience in public high school(Why were you apply for this teaching assistant )

After the interview ends. We had lunch together. It is in that time .I know her more deep. She quited her decent job and she is not happy. Now she feels good .

I admire her courage for dropping everything she had . Now everything is a new start for her.

Later .I added her wechat and I gave her another interview's chance . Hope she will be good .

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Making a new friend

Today I went for an interview.As I walked into the elevator.  , a girl stepped into the elevator at the same time . Then I asked her :"are you a teacher here?"she replied she is the interviewer .

We were called for having this interview together (We had both been called for this interview). As she was interviewing me , I got to know she already have had four years of teaching experience in public high schools (1)(Why weredo you want to apply for this teaching assistant position)

After the interview ends ended. ,we had lunch together. It is (It's) in that time .I got to know her more deeply. She quited quit her decent (2) job and she is not wasn't happy. Now she feels good .

I admire her courage for dropping everything she had. Now everything is a new start for her. (3)

Later . ,I added her in my wechat and I gave her another interview's chance (4) . Hope she will be good .

1. The correction depends on what you want to say. If you say "four years of teaching experience in a public high school" that means she worked in one place for 4 years. "four years of teaching experience in public high schools" would mean that she worked in several high schools during those 4 years.

2. I'd eliminate decent. Adding decent there gives me the expectation that you'll add where (for example, quit her decent job at XYZ school")

3. I admire her courage to drop everything and start anew would sound much more natural.

4. The first part of the text makes it sound as if you're the potential employee and she's the interviewer. Now at the end it seems you're the interviewer and she's the potential employee. Which one are you?

5. I eliminated a lot of dots (.) and replaced them with commas (,). A dot is a finished sentences and a comma is when you have more things to say.



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