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Hurting the world One of the biggest problems in the world is the pollution and damage to the environment. Humans have it into account when the consequences of our behavior will affect our daily routines. Firstly, the number of cars per family has increased because of almost two is necessary for parents to go to work. Government is conscious of it, so has lowed the task of public transport being more accessible and comfortable. In fact, you can use it illimited times per month if you buy a card for twelve euros. In the second place, factories throw their toxics substances to the rivers and seas, despite it is not allowed. Preventing that, close areas could create for these types of wastes. Like this, sea animals would not die by this action. Not to mention the care of forests and plants. Humans cause many fires every summer by their disruptive behavior. Everyone should know we rely on oxygen which plants provide us through photosynthesis. To sum up, the maintenance of the earth is responsibility from everyone. If it continues, it will have a lack of vital resources. Simples actions can save for the living being.
2018년 6월 3일 오후 10:46
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Hurting the world

One of the biggest problems in the world is the pollution and damage to the environment. Humans have it into account will be responsible when the consequences of our behavior will affect our daily routines.

Firstly, the number of cars per family has increased because of almost of the fact that two is are necessary for parents to go to work. Government is conscious of it, so has lowered the task cost of public transport, making it being more accessible and comfortable. In fact, you can use it illimited an unlimited number of times per month if you buy a card for twelve euros.

In the second place, factories throw their toxics substances into the rivers and seas, despite the fact that it is not allowed. Preventing that, close areas could create for these types of wastes. Like this, sea animals would not die by this action. Preventing that by closing those factories could eliminate those types of waste (or contamination).  If this were done, sea animals would not die from the waste (or contamination).

Not to mention the care of forests and plants. Humans cause many fires every summer by their disruptive behavior. Everyone should know we rely on oxygen which plants provide us through photosynthesis.

To sum up, the maintenance of the earth is the responsibility from of everyone. If it continues, it we will have a lack of vital resources. Simples actions can save the environment for the all living beings.
2018년 6월 4일
Could anyone correct this writing, please?:)
2018년 6월 4일
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