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In your English class you have been talking about life in the past. Now, your English teacher has asked you to write an essay.
Write an essay using all the notes and give reasons for your point of view.
Life is better today than it was 100 years ago. Do you agree?
Notes
Write about:
1. health
2. entertainment
3 ... your own idea
I agree with the statement that life is better today that it was 100 years ago. There have been any improvements in different areas, but mainly in health, entertainment and technology.
Firstly, we can see a progress in the field of health, for instance today, exist campaigns and a lot of information about relevant illness like VIH, obesity, depression, etc., which before our ancestors could not speak due to certain taboos. In fact, money and time are invested in research about these diseases and treatments that allow the improvement and maintenance of good health in humans.
Secondly, with the born of the Internet people can entertainment easily, because now they have access to different kind of programmes in comparison with the past, such as TV series of other countries, past programmes or countless videos. Besides
the use of the internet is increased due to the number of devices through which everybody access is made to it.
To sum up, the times have changed and the technology have influenced in improve the quality of the life of the humans for example in areas of healthy and entertainment
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Somebody could help me to review this essay, please? Thanks in advancedIn your English class you have been talking about life in the past. Now, your English teacher has asked you to write an essay.
Write an essay using all the notes and give reasons for your point of view.
Life is better today than it was 100 years ago. Do you agree?
Notes
Write about:
1. health
2. entertainment
3 ... your own idea
I agree with the statement that life is better today than it was 100 years ago. There have been many improvements in different areas, but mainly in health, entertainment and technology.
First, we can see a progress in the field of health, for instance today, exist campaigns and a lot of information about relevant illness like VIH, obesity, depression, etc., which before our ancestors could not speak due to certain taboos. In fact, money and time are invested in research about these diseases and treatments that allow the improvement and maintenance of good health in humans.
Secondly, with the born of the Internet people can entertainment easily, because now they have access to different kind of programs in comparison with the past, such as TV series of other countries, past programmes or countless videos. Besides
the use of the internet is increased due to the number of devices through which everybody access is made to it.
To sum up, the times have changed and the technology have influenced in improve the quality of the life of the humans for example in areas of health and entertainment
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Somebody could help me to review this essay, please? Thanks in advancedIn your English class you have been talking about life in the past. Now, your English teacher has asked you to write an essay.
Write an essay using all the notes and give reasons for your point of view.
Life is better today than it was 100 years ago. Do you agree?
Notes
Write about:
1. health
2. entertainment
3 ... your own idea
I agree with the statement that life is better today than it was 100 years ago. There have been many improvements in different areas, mainly in health, entertainment and technology.
First, we can see a progress in the field of health. For instance today, there exist campaigns and a lot of information about relevant illness like HIV, obesity, depression, etc., which our ancestors could not speak of in the past due to certain taboos. In fact, money and time are invested in research about these diseases and treatments that allow the improvement and maintenance of good health in humans.
Second, with the birth of the Internet, people can find entertainment easily because they now have access to different kinds of programmes in comparison with the past, such as TV series of other countries, past programmes or countless videos. In addition,
the use of the internet is increased due to the number of devices through which everybody uses to access it.
To sum it up, the times have changed and the technology has influenced and improved the quality of the life of humans such as in areas of healthy and entertainment.
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