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The script of introduce my self. I thought It's better to prepare some script to introducing my self because We often do that. So I made some sentences for that. Please correct that if there is error and please rewrite more natural expression. And if you have advice like you should add more information and so on, please teach me. It will be really helpful! Name/Gender/Age My name is Akari. I'm 22 years old. I'm a University Student and I'm studying Architecture. I live in Fukushima with my family. My family is grandparents, my parents and brother, six of us. My brother is 20 years old. He is a university student as well. We have a dog, dachshund. Her name is May. She likes eating. About Hobby  My hobby is watching TV dramas. My favourite TV drama is Game of Thorne. I like that drama because that script, clothing and set of every scene have so much detail about that. But the simple reason I like that, I just addicted to keeping watch. About Food what I like  I have three favourite food. I can't decide which one is best. That three foods are Potato, Chocolate and Macaroon. I usually eat potato as french fry and Potato pancake. If you cook Potato Pancake, I recommend you add onions. It is going to be tastier! About food what I don't like I don't like Celery. There is no fault for Celery but I am not good at ? that smell. If I eat that the flavour spread all around my nose and I feel terrible. About my hometown My hometown is in the north of Fukushima and it is called Kunimi. The population is nine thousand people. Thirty-six per cent of people are over sixty-five years old. This town is famous for Preach. We can eat fresh Preach in summer. Thank a lot

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The A script to introduce myself.

I thought It would be better to prepare some script to for introducing myself, because we often do that. So I made wrote some sentences for that. Please correct that if there is any errors and please rewrite with more natural expressions. And If you have advice, like "you should add more information" and so on, please teach tell me. It would be really helpful!

Name/Gender/Age
My name is Akari. I'm 22 years old. I'm a University Student and I'm studying Architecture.
I live in Fukushima with my family. My family is grandparents, parents and brother which makes six of us.
My brother is 20 years old. He is a university student as well.
We have a dog, dachshund. Her name is May. She likes eating.

About Hobby 
My hobby is watching TV dramas. My favourite TV drama is Game of Thrones.
I like that drama because that the script, clothing and set of every scene have so much detail about that in them.
But basically the simple reason I like that, I'm just addicted to keeping watching it.

About food that I like.
I have three favourite foods. I can't decide which one is best. Those three foods are Potato, Chocolate and Macaroons.
I usually eat potato as french fries and or potato pancake. If you cook potato pancake, I recommend that you add onions. If you do, it is going to be tastier!

About food that I don't like
I don't like Celery. There It is not celery's fault, but for me it's no good. That smell!
If I eat any the flavour spreads all around my nose and I feel terrible.

About my hometown
My hometown is in the north of Fukushima and it is called Kunimi.
The population is nine thousand people. Thirty-six per cent of people are over sixty-five years old.
This town is famous for peaches. We can eat fresh peach in summer.

Thanks a lot

Really nice writing. I think you have a friendly and fun tone. Remember you don't need to put a capital letter on regular nouns (like apple, cup, face...) Only on "proper nouns" - (peoples names, place names, brand names eg John, Paris, Nissen)
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The script of introduce my self.

I thought It's better to prepare some script to introducing my self because We often do that. So I made some sentences for that. Please correct that if there is error and please rewrite more natural expression. And if you have advice like you should add more information and so on, please teach me. It will be really helpful!

Name/Gender/Age
My name is Akari. I'm 22 years old and a University Student studying Architecture.
I live in Fukushima with my family. My grandparents, parents and brother, six of us.
My brother is 20 years old. He is a university student as well.
We have a dog, called May, she is a dachshund who likes eating. 

About Hobby 
My hobby is watching TV dramas. My favourite TV drama is Game of Thorne.
I like that drama because the script, clothing and set of every scene has so much detail and really brings it to life.
I'm now addicted to it and I can not wait for the next season to come out.

About Food that I like 
I have three favourite foods. I can't decide which one is best. The three foods are potato, chocolate and macaroon.
I usually eat potato as a french fry or potato pancake. If you cook potato pancakes, I recommend you add onions, they will be tastier!

About food that I don't like
I don't like celery. If I eat celery the flavour spreads all around my nose and I feel terrible.

About my hometown
My hometown is in the north of Fukushima and it is called Kunimi.
The population is nine thousand people. Thirty-six per cent of people are over sixty-five years old.
This town is famous for Preach. We can eat fresh Preach in summer.  (not sure you meant Preach?  Did you mean peaches, a soft fruit with lots of juice in them?)

Thank a lot


Great start with your sentences all easy to understand.  You may want to add more detail to your hobby, such as who your favourite character is and why.

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I'm a university student of architecture.

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