Why are labels important?
Do you think people are going crazy trying to labeling sexuality and gender identity? Why so many labels? Is it really necessary?
Maybe it’s just a confusing thing for people who are comfortable with their identity and sexuality. However, it can be extremely important to the ones who are confused and feeling lonely. When they find out that they fit in, they feel they belong to a group and they aren’t alone in the world anymore.
For example, as a teenager I was really confused, because sometimes I was in love with a girl and sometimes with a boy. When it was a girl, I used to be really afraid and confused because it wouldn’t be easy to face the world being homosexual. In the other hand, I felt really relieved when it was a boy. At time, I didn’t know that it was possible to be attracted to more than one gender and when I grew older, it was a relief to know that I wasn’t crazy. I can’t even imagine how confusing and scary this can be when it’s related to gender identity.
That’s why labels are essential to these people’s life. If you don’t like to be labeled, it’s ok, but don’t say it’s useless.
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Why are labels important?
Do you think people are going crazy trying to labeling sexuality and gender identity? Why so many labels? Is it really necessary?Maybe it’s just a confusing thing for people who are comfortable with their identity and sexuality. However, it can be extremely important to the ones (those) who are confused and feeling lonely. When they find out that they fit in, they feel they belong to a group and they aren’t alone in the world anymore.
For example, as a teenager I was really confused, because sometimes I was in love with a girl and sometimes with a boy. When it was a girl, I used to be really afraid and confused because it wouldn’t be easy to face the world being (as a) homosexual. On the other hand, I felt really relieved when it was a boy. At the time, I didn’t know that it was possible to be attracted to more than one gender and when I grew older, it was a relief to know that I wasn’t crazy. I can’t even imagine how confusing and scary this can be when it’s related to gender identity.
That’s why labels are essential to these people’s life (lives). If you don’t like to be labeled, it’s ok, but don’t say it’s useless.
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Very well-written with only a couple of tiny corrections. The words I've highlighted in the darker green shade are not strictly errors, but I think the alternatives I've suggested sound more natural.
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