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Writing Task 2 There are a lot of people living in poor countries which are in wars or in poor condition. However, some people believe that the richer nation should help poorer countries to improve and make better condition for these countries. There are also many poor family which live in the rich countries. They earn money and pay taxes to their countries, so I believe that government should help them first, instead of those who pay nothing. If the money which was used to help another countries was used for helping poor people, like free education or free medical system, there will be more happiness in the countries. In my country, the government spend lots of money to help some countries in Africa. We help them in education, medical system and also in agriculture, but some people in my country can't afford school fee. Some people are in terrible sick but they don't have enough money to go to see the doctor or buy the medicine. The reason of the government spend lots of money on the poor countries is for diplomatic relationship, but the government forget that their people should be considered first. If my country spend more money on the people who live with the awful condition, I believe there will be less sadness and more happiness in my country. Some people think the richer countries should take the responsibility to help the poorer countries. I believe the government should take care of their people first instead of the people who live in other country.

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There are a lot of people living in poor countries, which are in at war or in poor conditions. However, some people believe that the richer nation should help poorer countries to improve and make better conditions for these countries.

There are also many poor families,which live in the rich countries. They earn money and pay taxes to their countries, so I believe that the government should help them first, instead of those who pay nothing. If the money, which was used to help another other countries, was used for helping poor people, like get free education or a free medical system, there will would be more happiness in those countries.

In my country, the government spends lots of money to help some countries in parts of Africa. We help them in with Education, medical systems and also in agriculture, but some people in my country can't afford school fees. Some people are in terribly sick but they don't have enough money to go to see the doctor or buy the medicine. The reason of why the government spends lots of money on the poor countries, is for diplomatic relationships, but the government forgets that their people should be considered first. If my country spends more money on the people who live in awful conditions, I believe there would be less sadness and more happiness in my country.

Some people think the richer countries should take the responsibility, to help the poorer countries. I believe the government should take care of their people first, instead of the people who live in other countries.

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