To Jørgen Hansen Thank you!! I'm happy to read it. You evaluated objectively. I didn't think about the role of each paragraph. You give me a opportunity to think about writing essay deeply. I appreciate it very much!!!

I like your lyrical/descriptive essay. In it, you combine poetry, essay, memoir, and research writing into one unit. In the first paragraph you appeal to three senses: smell, sound, and touch. I like the phrase, 'The sound of trees.' It's short and almost a kind of personification of trees. I infer it means the sound of the wind in the leaves. Then you exalt the feeling of wood over that of concrete, using the word, pleasure. Then you make the transition from the senses we have to nature: we are a part of it. And you describe the state of pollution using double personification, "the poison called plastic is drunk, They are screaming." They refer to the trees, I infer. Very good. Then in the next paragraph there is a change of tenses. First line: past tense; second line: present tense; third and fourth line: present and future tense. The concept of dying is repeated three times. The earth is dying, later, animals and plant will die too. And then you make a transition to your main point: we must 'heal nature.' We must heal nature because 1. 'Earth 's natural power has been destroyed by humans' and 2. because if 'pollution continues to spread, all life die out.' In healing nature, you appeal first to man's character: We must show respect. Then his mind: we must learn how. Finally, you appeal to man's. deeds, the concrete outworking of the former two: we must plant.