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The gentrification in London Nowadays based on the capitalism, Greenwich in London could be gentrified significantly−No. It has been starting already.

However, it could not be a homogenization such as Japan which is purified by the same sensibility. Namely, I suppose it could be included a range of dynamic possiblities such as the diversity and evolution in human culture.

Walking through this city, I couldn't help without praying local people's hope while I listened to children's pure voices. The history only knows the truth. The time watch faced the truth.

It could be more diverse and brilliant city within a couple of years in the future. Since an artist who is born in this city could create masterpieces for the new world-like David Bowie born in Brixton.

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Hi, Nami. I can't evaluate the result of the gentrification. (In general, it has positive effects for whole community and negative effects for the poor people who live in the area.) So, let's put aside the evaluation and return to your essay. (1) How do you assess that of Japan? I assumed you thought Japan had good result. (2) You worried about Greenwich. I can't understand the expression, "It could be more diverse and brilliant city... ." / Anyway, I expect a good correction of this writing.
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Gentrification in London

Nowadays, based on capitalism, Greenwich in London could be gentrified significantly. No. It has started already.

However, it might not be a homogenization, such as in Japan, which is purified by the same sensibility. Namely, I suppose it could include a range of dynamic possiblities, such as the diversification* (I think you may mean this ..?)  and evolution of human culture.

Walking through this city, I couldn't help praying for local people's hopes while I listened to children's pure voices. History only knows the truth. The time watch faced the truth. (I don't understand quite what you mean by "the time watch" )

It could be a more diverse and brilliant city within a couple of years, (" n the future" is implied by "within a couple of years" and would probably be better left out.)  since an artist ("who is" - you could leave these words out)  born in this city could create masterpieces for the new world, like David Bowie, born in Brixton.


* https://en.oxforddictionaries.com/definition/diversification

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Hi shou, exactly. I felt the negative aspect from this city. Do you think this gentrification have a positice aspect ?
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(1) I got to know the word, "gentrify." (2) I think you underlined the negative aspects of the gentrification in the second paragraph because you said “I couldn't help (without) praying... .” Is it right?

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