My hobby My hobby is origami. Origami is an art of paper folding. When I was at junior school, my teacher showed students how to fold a sheet of paper to make a figure like a parrot or a crane. I rea

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My hobby My hobby is origami. Origami is an art of paper folding. When I was at junior school, my teacher showed students how to fold a sheet of paper to make a figure like a parrot or a crane. I really liked it and I asked the teacher how to make any other figure. She told me to get a book about origami in the library. The book contained a lot of instuctions of how to make different figures. I got the book and made every figure in it. Then I thought that it was too easy for me, so I asked my parents to buy me another book about origami. There were a lot more complex figures therein, but I have made all of it's figures and I enjoyed it a lot. After that I was bored and stopped making figures for some time. Later, when I was at high school, I got an access to the internet, so I searched for new, more complicated figures. I found an instruction of how to make a pegasus. I spent a lot of time to make it but I was unable to finish it because notebook paper that I used was too thick. I tried to find thinner paper, but what I discovered was that I have to make it on my own from aluminium foil and very thin paper. It was too hard for me so I gave up. The pegasus is the last figure that I've ever made.

2018년 9월 12일 오전 9:19

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My hobby

My hobby is origami.
Origami is an art of paper folding. When I was at junior school, my teacher showed students how to fold a sheet of paper to make a figure like a parrot or a crane. I really liked it and I asked the teacher how to make <strike>any</strike> other figures. She told me to get a book about origami in the library.
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Later, when I was at high school, I got <strike>an</strike> access to the internet so I searched for new, more complicated figures. I found <strike>an</strike> instructions on <strike>of</strike> how to make a Pegasus. I spend a lot of time making <strike>ot make</strike> it but I was unable to finish it because the notebook paper that I used was too thick. I tried to find thinner paper, but <strike>what</strike> I discovered <strike>was</strike> that I had <strike>have</strike> to make it on my own from aluminium foil and very thin paper. It was too hard for me so I gave up. The Pegasus was <strike>is</strike> the last figure that I've ever made.

Hi! On the whole you have written this clearly and it is understandable. I have corrected your tense in places so it all reads in 'past tense' and also so it sounds like a native English speaker has written it. It's a shame you didn't carry on with your origami, it sounds like you were very good!

Kind Regards

Pauline Snowdon - italki teacher.

Writing in bold doesn't make sense. Did you mean to add something else here? If so add it in, if not then just delete it.

2018년 9월 12일

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