TOEFL writing
I am studying English for the TOEFL exam. (this is for a writhing section)
I hope you help improve my English.
Thank you for in advance.
Topic:
Movies are popular all over the world. Explain why movies are so popular. Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.
My answer:
I will explain why movies are so popular.
There are a couple of reasons.
Allow me to explain.
First of all,movies are good for family time both watch at home,
and a cinema.
when I watched movie with my father,we talked really a lot than
usual, after the movie.
He is busy for work we don't have much time to spent
together and we don't much talk each other recently.
It was makes me happy a lot.
Secondly, personally I think movies are better than dramas.
When people watch a drama, we can't miss even one episode
But sometimes it's pretty difficult for us, because
every one buys for work, study, and take care kids, family etc .
Movies don't need wait next episode, easier to enjoy a story
than a drama.
Thirdly, movies are good for learn history etc.
When I was a student, I wasn't big fan of a history subject.
Even though I was very interested in war movies and I learned
lot of second war from movies.
in conclusion, for the above reasons.
That's why movies are popular entire the world.
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TOEFL writing
I am studying English for the TOEFL exam. (this is for a writing section)I hope you help improve my English.
Thank you for this/helping in advance.
Topic:
Movies are popular all over the world. Explain why movies are so popular. Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.
My answer:
I will explain why movies are so popular. There are a couple of reasons. Allow me to explain.
First of all, movies are good for family time both watching at home, and at a cinema. When I watched a movie with my father, we talked really a lot more than usual after the movie. He is busy because of work so we don't have much time to spend
together and recently we don't much talk to each other. It was making me happy a lot.
Secondly, personally I think movies are better than dramas. When people watch a drama, we can't miss even one episode. But sometimes it's pretty difficult for us, because every one needs time for work, study, and to take care of kids, family, etc. Movies don't need us to wait for a/the next episode, so it is easier to enjoy a story than a drama.
Thirdly, movies are good for learning history, etc.* When I was a student, I wasn't a big fan of history subjects.
Even though I was very interested in war movies and I learned a lot about the Second World War from movies.
in conclusion, for the above reasons, that's why movies are popular in the entire world.
[* Or: "good to learn history, etc."
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