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IELTS Writing- Task 1 ( please help me correct this note book, thank you The chart below shows information about Istanbul Promo Plus sales how fluctuated over the period of 12 months in one year. It was observed that in the first month of this year, the sales of Istanbul Promo Plus stood at 200 million of Turkish lira and rose slightly to reach about 225 million. This was followed by another increase, there were around 125 million higher than the last month. This upward trend was broken suddenly over the next 4 months and plummeted dramatically to get a little over 100 million in July. August showed a significant rise back to January as the same level as figures. This was the last as they dropped again in September as the sales they were in July. October came with a strong increase to get about 175 million in sales and remained relatively static over the last three months. Overall, Prom Plus sales in 2007 remained relatively unchanged as in January, May and August were fairly equal. Sales were at the highest in March while July and September could be observed as the weakest number.

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IELTS Writing- Task 1 ( please help me correct this note book, thank you

The chart below shows information about how Istanbul Promo Plus sales how have fluctuated over the period of 12 months in one year.
It was observed that, in the first month of this year, ("in the first month" is a prepositional phrase so it can be moved to the start of the sentence.  If it is not at the beginning of the sentence, it should have commas on either side) the sales of Istanbul Promo Plus stood at 200 million of (when stating currency, you don't need to use of or in) Turkish lira and rose slightly to reach about (about is a non ideal term when using financial terms.  It is better to say "almost" or "just over" )225 million. This was followed by another increase, there were of around 125 million higher than (you already said it was an increase so you don't need to use higher than again) over (when doing financial comparisons, you typically use the term "month over month", this simply means the change based on the same time perion) the last prior ( month.
This upward trend was broken suddenly over the next 4 months and plummeted dramatically to get a little over 100 million in July. August showed a significant rise back to January as the same level as January figures. This was the last increase as they dropped again in September as the sales to the levels they were in July. October came with had a strong increase to get about 175 million in sales and then remained relatively static over the last three months.
Overall, Promo Plus sales in 2007 remained relatively unchanged as in January, May and August were fairly equal* ended the year flat to January levels. Sales were at the highest in March while July and September could were be observed as the weakest numbers.

* In financial terms, you cannot describe huge changes up and down that end the same as 'unchanged' because there were a lot of changes over the course of the year.  If you want to state sales ended in December close to what they were in January, you can use the language I put above).

Overall, very impressive given a hard topic!

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