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Who I wanted to be in my childhood Well, who I wanted to be in my childhood? There were many professions, which attracted me. I supposed to be a banker, or a model. But most of all I wanted to be a singer. I actually went to the music school to learn singing. I imagined that I sing in the opera, that I am Carmen, Tosca, or snow maiden. But because of circumstances I was compelled to drop out of the music school. After all, I have graduated university as a political scientist, but this occupation didn’t attracted me and for now I am unemployed. I think a ten-year girl, who I was, would be very disappointed if she saw me present, because I couldn’t carry out most of her dreams and expectations. It is sad but true.

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Who I wanted to be in my childhood

Who did I want to be in my childhood? There were many professions which attracted me. I wanted to be a banker, or a model. But most of all, I wanted to be a singer. I actually went to music school to learn singing. I imagined that I was singing in the opera, that I was Carmen, Tosca, or a snow maiden. But because of circumstances I was compelled to drop out of music school. I graduated university as a political scientist, but this occupation didn’t attract me and for now I am unemployed.
I think the ten-year girl which I was would be very disappointed if she saw me now, because I couldn’t achieve most of her dreams and expectations. It is sad but true.


Your paragraph is perfectly understandable, these are corrections for style and native sound only.

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Well, what did I want to be in my childhood? There were many professions which were attractive to me. I supposed I would be a banker, or a model. But most of all I wanted to be a singer. I actually went to a music school to learn how to. I imagined singing in an opera, that I was Carmen, Tosca, or a snow maiden. But because of circumstances I was forced to drop out of the music school. In the end I graduated university as a political scientist, but this occupation didn’t suit me and for now I am unemployed. I think the ten-year girl who I was would be very disappointed if she saw me at present, because I couldn’t fulfill most of her dreams and expectations. It is sad but true.

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