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Young Drivers: The High Risk Years (Part 2) Part 1: https://www.italki.com/entry/962478 The law restrictions should be reinforced by parents. They should give their children a clear messages that they need to focus on driving. They should insist on no alcohol, not allowing teenage peers in a car while driving, set a nighttime curfew. The kind of the vehicle is also very important. Parents should avoid small cars, sport cars and pickups, because the last ones have a tendency to roll over and they are harder to handle. Mid-size car with the latest safety technologies is the best choice. The law is never sufficient until parents stay involved. The more they pay attention to their children’s first years of driving, the more safer their children are.
2019년 1월 1일 오후 5:42
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Young Drivers: The High Risk Years (Part 2)

Part 1: https://www.italki.com/entry/962478


The Law restrictions should be reinforced by parents. They should should give their children a clear message that they need to focus on driving. They should insist on no prohibit alcohol, having teenage peers in the car while driving and, lastly, set a nighttime curfew. The kind of the vehicle is also very important. For the learner's sake, parents should avoid small cars, sports cars and pick-ups, because they  have a tendency to roll and they are harder to handle. Mid-sized cars with the latest safety technologies is the would be the best  safest choice. The law is insufficient unless parents uphold it. The more attention that is paid during a child's first years of driving, the safer they will be. 


Good work! Gramatically, most of this piece is correct. I have changed some words and re-structured some scentences to improve the tone and flow of the paragraph. 

2019년 1월 1일
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