Please correct me!!!
Last week one of my dear clients made a workshop in Vienna for graphic designers, with whom they have been working, to present their new brand identity. It was a global event for two days with almost 50 participantes from all over the world. The aim of this was to build a strong and recognizable brand identity, to make advertising materials similar in each country.
I am proud to be a designer for a such professional marketing team. I wish all companies had so serious attitude to their branding. It is the right way to be one of the most famous brands of the world. We should be ambitious, don't we?
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Please correct me!!!
Last week, one of my dear clients gave (or maybe "hosted") a workshop in Vienna for graphic designers, with whom they have been working, to present their new brand identity. It was a global event lasting two days, with almost 50 participants from all over the world. The aim of this was to build a strong and recognizable brand identity, to make advertising materials similar in each country. (Or you might write : " ... to ensure that marketing materials are consistent in all countries.")I am proud to be a designer for such a professional marketing team. I wish all companies had so serious an attitude (or "such a serious attitude" - but you've just used "such") to their branding. It is the right way to be one of the most famous brands in the world. We should be ambitious, shouldn't (matches the "should") we?
This is good. Your opening sentence is just a little complex (not a mistake or error). It could be simplified to something like : "Last week, one of my dear clients held a workshop in Vienna, to present their new brand identity. This was for graphic designers they have been working with*. It was ..."
* Your "with whom they have been working" is grammatically correct, and quite formal. You should probably be aware that, whatever you may have been taught, there is really no accepted blanket rule in English against ending sentences with prepositions. Indeed, with many phrasal verbs, there can be no elegant way to avoid this.
https://en.oxforddictionaries.com/grammar/ending-sentences-with-prepositions
https://blog.oxforddictionaries.com/2011/11/28/grammar-myths-prepositions/
https://www.quickanddirtytips.com/education/grammar/ending-a-sentence-with-a-preposition
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Please correct me!!!
Last week one of my dear clients made a workshop in Vienna for graphic designers, with whom they have been working, to present their new brand identity. It was a global event for two days with almost 50 participants from all over the world. The aim of this was to build a strong and recognizable brand identity, to make advertising materials similar in each country.I am proud to be a designer for a such professional marketing team. I wish all companies had a very serious attitude to their branding. It is the right way to be one of the most famous brands in the world. We should be ambitious, don't we?
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Please correct me!!!
Last week, one of my dear clients attended a workshop in Vienna for graphic designers to present their new brand. It was a two-day global event, with about 50 participants from all over the world. This workshop aimed to build a strong and recognizable brand and to make advertising materials similar in each country.
I am proud to be a designer for a such professional marketing team. I wish all companies had such a serious attitude toward their branding. It is incredibly important, as one of the most famous brands in the world, to have professional and streamlined marketing. We should be ambitious, shouldn't we?
Great Job! I changed a few things for flow, but it was overall very well written. I removed the word "identity" because the word brand already encompasses the meaning of identity in this context.
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