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Essay - Some things in life more important than money. I reckon money is obviously important. People can’t live without money in the modern world. We need it to pay for renting flat, buying food, buying clothes and entertainment. Unfortunately, some people believe that money is the most important thing and they waste all life for earning money. They don’t recognize that we can’t create more time and add extra time to our life. At the end of life this people will realize that they made the greatest mistake then chose the wrong path. I guess people have to find balance between work and things we really enjoy. We’re fond of spending time with family and friends, travelling, cooking, playing diverse games and so on. All these things are not less important than money. Furthermore, there’re lots of illness such a cancer, an Alzheimer’s disease, a lupus those people are not able to cure so there’s no doubt physical and mental health is more important than money. I honestly feel we mustn’t forget about primary things while we are earning money.

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Essay - Some things in life are more important than money.

I reckon money is obviously important. People can’t live without money in the modern world. We need it to pay for renting a flat, buying food, buying clothes, and entertainment.

Unfortunately, some people believe that money is the most important thing [in life], and they waste their lives earning money. They don’t recognize that we can’t create more time and add extra time to our life. At the end of their lives, these people will realize that they made the greatest mistake, having chosen the wrong path.

I guess people have to find a balance between work and things they really enjoy. We’re fond of spending time with family and friends, travelling, cooking, playing various / different games, and so on. All these things are not less important than money.

Furthermore, there is lots of illness such as cancer, an Alzheimer’s disease, a and lupus that those people are not able to cure, so there’s no doubt that physical and mental health are more important than money.

I honestly feel we mustn’t forget about primary [the most basic] things while we are earning money.
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The word "reckon" is correct English, but it might sometimes sound informal, or like dialect speech.

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