Shana
It was a very hot day, me and my friend both were regretful of not bringing umbrella. On the way to the show, we could hear the loud music when closing the destination. As we came late, there were already so many people aggregating around the “stage”, obviously no good view for us except watching backs of other people. Luckily, people left successively when dusk came. We finally stood in a front place where we could watch the dancers explicitly and directly. I had to admit that the playing music were so good and the dancing were so appealing that I wasn’t willing to have a blink. Whatever song played, there were some dancers jumped out and began to catch the tempo with proper motions. I admired of their ability to remember the motions of so many songs and various tempos, meanwhile I kept hoping my own memory could be the same. Everyone were wearing a smile on their face when dancing, which made the show more attractive. In the middle of the show, I even heard a conversation from a middle-age woman told her friend, ”You can leave first, I rather stay here longer because these kids are so good-looking”. If only two words were allowed to describe this event, I would choose “Youth” and ”Dream”. The popular culture of Korea is always prevalent among youngsters. Some people would learn Korean for their idols, some would learn dancing so that they can dance with their idols’ songs. From the first no attention to the show to now the gratefulness to my friend, I begin to agree that we deserve to have new try in daily life, and the delight from the new change should always deserve us to follow. (I delete the first paragraph of this writing because of word limitation,hopefully its coherence still works. If any mistakes in grammar and words,they must be the part I couldn't detect by myself😩)
2022년 4월 4일 오전 11:00
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It was a very hot day, me and my friend both regretted not taking an umbrella. On the way to the show, we could hear the loud music when nearing our destination. Because we arrived late, there were already many people congregating around the “stage”, which obviously meant there was no good view for us as all we could see was the backs of other people's heads. Luckily, people left quickly when dusk came. We finally stood at the front where we could watch the dancers clearly. I had to admit that the music was so good and the dancing was so appealing that I didn’t want to even blink. Whatever song was being played, there were some dancers who jumped out and began to catch the tempo with appropriate motions. I admired their ability to remember the steps of so many songs and various tempos, meanwhile I kept hoping my own memory could be as good. Everyone was wearing a smile on their face when dancing, which made the show more attractive. In the middle of the show, I even heard a middle-aged woman tell her friend, ”You can leave first, I'd rather stay here longer because these kids are so good-looking”. If only two words were allowed to describe this event, I would choose “Youth” and ”Dream”. The popular culture of Korea is always prevalent among youngsters. Some people learn Korean because of their idols, some learn dancing so that they can dance to their idols’ songs. From start of the show I was grateful to my friend. I am beginning to agree that we deserve to try new things in our daily lives, and the delight from these changes should always lead us to follow the ideas of others.
Not sure exactly what you were trying to say near the end.
2022년 4월 4일
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