The Tim じぁん!!!
It's a sunny but chilly day today. Back home, I got my Christmas present from Mom a little early. She's terrible at keeping secrets, so the surprise was pretty much ruined anyway. It's a set of purple and pink clip-in hair extensions. Since I'm not allowed to dye my hair yet, these are a good compromise. Dad didn't mind; he probably thinks they look good on me. How handy! I'm starting to get why people wear wigs. You could collect tons of them in every color and style imaginable and completely change your look every day.
2024년 12월 17일 오전 11:42
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It's a sunny but chilly day today. Back home, I received my Christmas present from my Mom a little early. She's terrible at keeping secrets, so the surprise was pretty much ruined anyway. It was a set of purple and pink clip-in hair extensions. Since I'm not allowed to dye my hair yet, these were a good compromise. Dad didn't mind; he probably thought they looked good on me. How handy! I'm starting to get why people wear wigs. You can collect tons of them in every color and style imaginable and completely change your look every day.
I've suggested another word instead of 'got' to make it sound nicer in written English, but 'got' is also fine. The rest I've put into past tense as you are talking about an event in the past. Great work generally, though!
2024년 12월 17일
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