Fajrul Falah
I am a police officer, everyday I meet and help people, I love this job because I can hook up with people and because of that I have many friends.
2020년 10월 23일 오전 11:29
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I am a police officer, everyday I meet and help people, I love this job because I can hook up with people and because of that I have many friends.
This is said perfectly and is clear to understand. One improvement you could consider is with the use of the term "hook up". This expression is used in modern speech today specifically with a romantic event. If I hooked up with someone I could be saying we spent the night together. To avoid that meaning, we would say "I like this job because it enables me to interact with a lot of different kinds people." Or "It enables me to meet up with" "We hooked up yesterday" could mean we spent the night together romantically. "We met up yesterday" would only mean we "hung out" and had dinner or went for a hike or something." I would not say to a friend "let's hook up later" That would be a bold comment suggesting romance. I would say "Let's meet up later!"
2020년 10월 23일
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I am a police officer, everyday I meet and help people, I love this job because I can hook up with people and because of that I have many friends.
It’s not punctuated correctly, and is a little redundant. You should break it into 3 sentences. Or you could simplify with something like: I love being a police officer because I meet and help people everyday. As a result, I have many friends.
2020년 10월 23일
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I am a police officer, everyday I meet and help people, I love this job because I can hook up with people and because of that, I have many friends.
Bravo!!
2020년 10월 23일
I am a police officer, everyday I meet and help people, I love this job because I can hook up with people and because of that I have many friends.i can also be your friend too
2020년 10월 23일
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