Tonia
would someone correct this for me, Please? If I won the lottery I would hire two people to care for my mother , especially skilled in alzheimer. I would help to my friend Nasir. Last I would buy an Island and I would travel around the world, I would go to the places or countries where the hand of man didn't touch the place,I mean it was wild ,and all naturall Thansk a lot.
2014년 9월 16일 오전 7:40
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If I won the lottery I would hire two people to care for my mother, specially-trained dealing with Alzheimer's. I would help my friend Nasir. Last, I would buy an island and I would travel around the world. I would go to the places or countries that are untouched by the hand of Man. Places that are wild and all natural. This reads like a short essay answer. If so, let me give you some advice: Your first paragraph needs more detail. Make it clear that your mother needs the special care of people trained with Alzheimer's patients. Your second paragraph needs more detail. Who is Nasir? What does he need? Why do you want to help him? Your third paragraph contains two ideas: buy an island AND travel the world. Choose one and focus on explaining why. The rest of your paragraph explains 'travel the world', so I would simply erase 'buy an island'. Hope that helps!
2014년 9월 16일
what is question ? do you need translate this phrase ?
2014년 9월 16일
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