Sarah
is this logically okay? or any problem>? We may also use some equipment to keep fit. Because many people live with a sedentary lifestyle which would probably result in obesity and they would want to lose some weight. You know, we don’t need to worry about the weather and we can do some sports even in rainy days.
2015년 8월 4일 오전 8:20
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The sentences don't have any "error" per se, except "in rainy days" (should be "on"). But that doesn't mean they read very well - I find many parts unnatural and strange sounding. (like the vague "some" being overused, the expression "do some sports", etc) Also the last two sentences can be structured better than tying sub-clauses with "and", I think. But it is more a style and clarity issues than outright "problems".
2015년 8월 4일
Submit in the Notebook section so that people can conveniently correct.
2015년 8월 4일
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