The sentence itself is good, but to make it real punchy, add "Australia is a highly sought after destination among students studying abroad". Gives it some kick and really ups your English proficiency.
2017년 2월 11일
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I agree with Darryl. Adding the word "highly" makes the sentence come across stronger. Other ways you can write this and mean the same thing:
"Australia is a highly sought-after destination among students who wish to study abroad."
"Australia is a highly sought-after destination for students who are looking to study abroad."
I hope my answers are helpful as well =)