Darya
English writing. Please correct my mistakes. I think some people know me, regardless of when our paths crossed or not. I would like to see if we can still communicate more than just likes or photos and actually write something to each other. I'd like to take part in an experience called "The Meeting between Bread". The idea is to see who reads the post without the photo. We are so immersed in technology that we have forgotten the most important thing - a good friendship. If no one reads this message, it will be a short social experiment. But if you read it all the way through, I want you to make a comment in one word about us. Like a place, an object, a person, a moment with which you relate to me. Then copy this text on your wall (don't share it) and I will go to your wall to leave a word that reminds me of you. Please do not write any comments if you do not have time to copy the text. This will ruin the experiment. Let's see who took the time to read and reply).
2020년 8월 1일 오전 8:26
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thanks for the corrections @Michel
2020년 8월 10일
I think some people know me, regardless of when our paths crossed or not. For this sentence, you could stop at "crossed" or you could change the "when" to "whether", but it doesn't work exactly as it is. I would like to see if we can still communicate more than just likes or photos and actually write something to each other. This is OK. I'd like to take part in an experience called "The Meeting between Bread". The idea is to see who reads the post without the photo. This looks OK too. Some might argue that you need a capital B for between, but I think either way is fine. We are so immersed in technology that we have forgotten the most important thing - a good friendship. If no one reads this message, it will be a short social experiment. OK this is clear, and it seems to me that it is designed for Facebook not italki. So I'll carry on :) But if you read it all the way through, I want you to make a comment in one word about us. Like a place, an object, a person, a moment with which you relate to me. italki Then copy this text on your wall (don't share it) and I will go to your wall to leave a word that reminds me of you. I don't have a Fb wall. I don't want to write on my house wall :) Please do not write any comments if you do not have time to copy the text. This will ruin the experiment. Let's see who took the time to read and reply). I would suggest you stay with the present tense with future meaning in your final sentence : "Let's see who takes the time to read and reply. (And I don't think you needed the right bracket at the end.) I wonder whether your experiment produced interesting results ....
2020년 8월 9일
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