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Describing a graph
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The line graph compares the number of visitors in three different museums in London from June to September, in the year 2013. It is measured in thousands of people. Overall, it can be seen that, the number of visitors increased in two of the three museums over the period.
British Museum received the highest number of visitors from the other two museums. In June, the number of visitors was 600 and rose sharply to July. In contrast, for Science and Natural History museums, the figures decreased during the same period, reaching both to around 370 visitors in July.
The visitors for Natural History museum continued to fall constantly until August to 300. This figure for Science museum maintained the same value of the previous month, while the number of visitors in British museum decreased sharply to 500. From August to September, both museums have experienced a steady growth. Science and Natural History museum had approximately 450 visitors and this number for British museum was just over the same its number for June, about 650 visitors.
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IELTS Writing Task 1
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The diagram demonstrates the necessary steps to perform a payment by a credit card between a consumer and a merchant. It can be seen that there are five steps and seven actions related to this process. Steps and actions are inter-connected.
On the first step the client performs a payment by its credit card. The merchant requests an authorization by sending the client’s data to the credit card organization. After some processing, the organization request an authorization to the consumer’s issuing bank. After a client’s data validation, the bank sends to the credit card organization the approving request which firstly is accounted by the organization and then is replied to the merchant. Finally, the merchant releases the request and the client is able to receive their products.
In the second process part, the merchant has informed the credit card organization that the transaction has been concluded and the consumer’s issuing bank must transfer the funds minus the credit card fees to the merchant’s bank. And then, the merchant’s bank performs the payment for the sales operations executed by the merchant.
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