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Hi, there. Recently I make up a story with an aim to answer the question of what community means to you. I post my story in the hope that you can give me some suggestions and corrections. Meanwhile, I wonder if you understand the meaning of this story. I strive to make it clear, but as an English learner, I know it might be difficult for you to fully understand due to my poor English. I' ll explain what I truly want to express throughout this story in the end and I hope that you can tell me whether my story has exactly conveyed my original intention. I am also interested in your ideas about your community.

MY STORY

Character: policeman(A), doctor(B), lawyer(C), teacher(D), taxi driver(E), piano player(F)

Background: F is playing the piano and above the piano is a photo taken two decades ago. The photo shows six 7-year-old children with a café called “Happy Time” behind them.

Dating back to the two decades when they were pupils. They were on good terms and each day they all did things together. At school, they help each other and after school, they went home, holding hands. They picked up the garbage on the street, feed the homeless dogs and plant trees. They say hello with the people living in the community. When they bumped into a woman with a baby in the buggy, D gave a toy to the baby and then they baby began to smile. Later, they came into that café where they often play in.

Spot: in that café , Timeline : after about a decade they became high school graduates

They sat around the table and there was admission letter for each one. However, six admission letters were written from four languages, which means they got a place in the uni from six different countries (America, England, China, Japan, Canada, Spain) At that moment, they all kept silent and they all felt sad because they had to separate and left….

Timeline: present

F stops playing and stares at that old photo. In his mind, he visualizes the other five working (A,B,C,D,E) in five different countries. All of a sudden, he got a call from someone, and he started to become anxious. He turned on the TV and there is news reporting an earthquake happened in the city where he grew up a few minutes ago. Behind the correspondent is that café where they spent most of their leisure time in the past.

Then the scene turns to the earthquake area.

B is feeding a patient. Just right now he seems to hear some voices. He turns around and see the other five childhood friends walking towards him from three directions….

END

My original intention: the story reveals that the community where we were raised (here it refers to the city struck by the earthquake) is so important to us. It holds many precious memories of our childhood. Even though we leave later, we still deeply love that place.

2017년 5월 13일

Whether reading is better than watching TV or playing computer games for children ? These days children are benefiting from a variety of leisure activities, ranging from reading to watching TV. There is argument that children will benefit more from reading instead of watching TV and playing computer games, however, in my view, I completely disagree with it and in this essay I will explain why. There is no denying that nowadays many TV programs whose target group are children are endeavoring to provide as much interesting broadcast as they can as well as keep young audiences entertained. These programs integrate many engaging videos and audios, which is more likely to give children a deep impression, further helping them learn what they watch by heart. Unquestionably, compared with these modern media, books seem to be less attractive to children who are curious and active in nature. A typical example in this case is a well-known child broadcast in China, called the little kids, big adventure. It is so successful that the majority of parents speak highly of it and encourage their children to watch after finishing their homework. As for playing computer games, the reason why I claim that it can also help children with their study, meanwhile entertaining them is that at present, some experts in education area has taken advantage of children’s vulnerability to games, developing excellent intelligence games with a view to kindle their interest in knowledge. It is wildly acknowledged that computer games allow young players get involved in a series of interaction sections. By make themselves become a part of virtual world and cooperate with other players, children undoubtedly will learn fast in order to win a victory if knowledge is designated to be a barrier. Again, this obvious merit is what reading books is lack of. To sum up, although reading has its undeniable advantages, I am convinced that for children living in this high-tech society, watching TV and playing computer games can make children benefit more.

2017년 1월 24일

Shall we categorize art lessons as the compulsory courses? These days it seems that more and more experts in education area begin to emphasize the vital significance of art classes, and some certain members of society argue that these lessons should be classified as the compulsory courses. Indeed, acquiring some basic knowledge and skills of art is beneficial to students, as such, I completely agree with this view. There are actually various reasons why I am in favor of the curriculum of art. One visible merit most people would agree with is that it plays a part in relieving students’ academic pressure markedly. It is understandable that nowadays every high school student is keen on finding a good way to easing the great admission challenge in order to get a place in the prestigious university. Undoubtedly, art lessons give them an excellent outlet to set them free temporarily, for students do not need to think about what the Gaussian equation is. A typical example in this case is that in China where all teachers place much attention to exam-oriented subjects like math and Chinese, most Chinese high school students regard art courses as their break time that allows them to get their mind out of the theoretical textbooks. In addition, another evident advantage of art classes would be that by appreciating and studying the greatest works of art, students’ imagination is fired and their creativity is boosted as well. It is no doubt that a creative mind is what the whole society will desperately need in the near future, therefore, cultivating a young generation that has their own originality certainly can bring unmeasurable benefits to both individuals and society. If the majority of young people have their own unique ideas, it would be a huge step forward for social development. To conclude, I firmly believe it is wise to include art lessons as one of the mandatory courses, as there are numerous merits of studying them.

2017년 1월 18일

커뮤니티 가이드라인을 위반한 콘텐츠입니다.2017년 1월 3일

reasons behind the high unemployment rate and some possible solutions Actually, there are possibly a variety of reasons behind high unemployment rate. One of the main culprit might be that with millions of graduates entering in the labor force every year, the competition in one post becomes increasingly fierce. For developed nations where attracts elites from all over the world, it has become more widespread that thousands of candidates compete for one hot position. When supply outnumbers demand, it makes sense that a large number of people cannot find a job. Another cause that leads to a high unemployment rate could be mass automation. As we embark on technology era, the increased automation reduces the number of jobs available, which adds more difficulty to job-seekers. In order to prevent situation getting worse, some measures should be taken to address this issue. I personally believe that the government is obliged to provide various vocational training programs without charge to make sure that people are able to get a job through what they have learnt. Furthermore, the jobless, themselves, are supposed to hold an optimistic attitude towards the employment outlook. What they should bear in mind is seizing every possible opportunity to develop themselves and holding a belief that it is just temporary being unemployed. Unquestionably, this seems to be wise while people waiting for being employed.

2017년 1월 3일

Both positive and negative influence of technology on work The most obvious advantage that technology has brought is that it makes our work more efficient and effective. With those cutting-edge innovations, people are empowered to fulfill their tasks wherever they like. A good case in this point is that Telecommuting radically changes the traditional way employees work and allows them to work in a more flexible schedule. Not only the enormous time cost technological revolution has saved in work, but it also cut down a considerable overhead cost. It is quite common that these days, administrative officers are not restricted to workplaces any more due to the great convenience of video conferencing. It is predictable that in the near future, there will be more technological breakthrough that can improve job satisfaction. Despite a multitude of undeniable merits, the negative impacts the technology has on work is still noteworthy. As the Internet spreads worldwide, cybercrimes, a new type of crime in the 21th century are becoming rampant. Suffering from privacy leakage, millions of netizens have fallen prey to online hacking. Not only this, the tendency for the public to become more dependent on technology also triggers concerns. Since everyone can google what they want to know online, fewer and fewer people are willing to think and solve problems on their own. It seems that technology deprive human beings of creativity and initiative, making them less creative than ever before.

2017년 1월 2일

the reason behind children's misbehavior at school There are a variety of reasons why students misbehave at school. One undeniable fact is that the number of students in each class is enormous in some countries, which means that it is unrealistic for teachers to give each individual attention. With teachers failing to control, the disruptive start to break rules flagrantly. In addition, it is noteworthy that the majority of unruly schoolchildren, in general, come from the poor-educated family background. Parents themselves may have no respect to others, therefore, there is no count on them to teach their children to conduct well. In addition, children sometimes are treated too lenient while making mistakes. Due to one child policy in China, seldom do children get punishment because of parent’s indulgence. Clearly, what parents and schools should priorities is to teach students to behave well. In some cases, punishment, I believe, is necessary, for sooner or later, children will have to suffer the bad consequences they lead to. For the young people, being aware that they must be responsible for their behavior at an early age is definitely better than at late age. Besides, schools in overpopulated countries also need to consider diminishing the size of each class since students are affected negatively in such a densely-populated space.

2016년 12월 23일

single sex education or co-education? Indeed, being taught separately, to some extent, can effectively avoid some unnecessary problems. Understandably, at certain ages, students of the opposite sex can be a distraction or even a harm. It is widely acknowledged that sexual harassment happened in school concerns a vast number of parents. Not only can single sex schooling ease this concern, but boosts students’ academic success. In fact, being in a single sex environment, students are more likely to focus on academia instead of their classmates. In addition, in terms of gender identity, schools are able to design courses that are more suitable for each gender, which help students fulfill their potential more easily. However, there are also some clear disadvantages of single sex education. Surrounded with the same sex, students undoubtedly lose many opportunities of co-existing or cooperating with their gender counterpart. As a result, their social skills cannot be acquired, which is detrimental to individual development. Single sex schooling artificially creates an unreal life where there is only one sex, but actually, what society comprises is both male and female. Without the opposite sex being, there is high likelihood that until nearly 30, students finally find a best way to get on well with the opposite gender. Therefore, I believe, going to single sex school decelerates children’s growth.

2016년 12월 23일

Are we becoming more dependent or independent? There is no denying that our lifestyle keeps changing with this fast-paced developing society. Certain members of society argue that we are becoming more dependent while others held an opposite view. In my opinion, most of people are becoming used to reliance on others. It is understandable that people who are in favor of tendency to dependence maintain that tremendous life pressure makes it impossible to solve all problems on our own. The young couple resort to their parents' help for child rearing because of a struggle of balance between work and family and few people are willing to fix the technical problems when they are aware that they can seek experts for help. whether it is to rely on others to achieve goals or counter problems has become commonplace in this modern society. On the other hand, those who oppose the tendency of dependence think people are able to handle everything with the great advance made in recent years. Indeed, as human beings make progress in medical system, senior citizens are capable of looking after themselves. In addition, technological innovations are bringing unmeasurable benefits to mankind, which facilitates our growth and independence. Despite this, the reason why people still prefer to depend on others is that their interpersonal skills may be improved by interaction. Therefore, I believe there is a growing trend that most of social members are turning more dependent. To sum up, due to life pressure and other purposes that people want to achieve, most of us are developing the habit of depending on others.

2016년 11월 7일

Transportation of My Hometown I am living in a tiny coastal city where traffic problems are getting worse these days. The increasing private vehicles add to burdens on traffic infrastructure, and the expanding road network ruins the peaceful life of rural people. I personally believe it is irreversible trend with urbanization and the awful traffic volume is the culprit of road rage. Unfortunately, due to the geographic reasons, there are plenty of twists and turns in my hometown, which undoubtedly makes many places become traffic bottleneck. The bumper-to-bumper traffic has become a commonplace in some small-sized cities nowadays, which not only causes numerous car accidents but also damages our environment. In order to reduce negative effect the bad traffic bring to us, some actionable measures should be taken urgently. In the first place, it is necessary to set up several car-free zones in central districts where traffic situation is the worst. By cycling to workplaces, millions of workers get enough exercises, as well as make contributions to their living cities. Meanwhile, I strongly suggest that the gas guzzlers should be replaced by more fuel-efficient ones in terms of the exhaust fume they pump out. At present, many countries have devoted to the production of environmentally-friendly hydrogen cars, an alternative in the fuel-driven cars, and if this new type of car were widespread in the future, air quality would improve significantly. To conclude, even though my hometown is facing a big challenge throughout the history, I hold an optimistic attitude toward its future as long as we are willing to start making changes.

2016년 10월 31일