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Short scholarship letter. Thanks! I just wrote this motivation letter for my scholarship application. I have to keep it this short because of the word limit. Could you guys please help me with this letter, and maybe improve it? Thank you so much! :) As a design student who has experience studying in different cultures and interning in several studios, I have always been passionate about design and would like nothing more than to dedicate myself to it. Therefore, I applied for your program and scholarship for the same reason you want me, to create innovative solutions that truly inspire. This scholarship represents to me more than just encouragement, but a motivation that keeps pushing me to achieve the best that I can. I deeply aware that studying at your school is no easy feat, but I am so ready to take new challenges and willing to get my hands dirty, to create something new and different. I believed that the scholarship can help me carve my design career, and I intend to seize this opportunity wholeheartedly. Thank you for taking the time to evaluate this, and hope you have a great day.

Short scholarship letter, please help me refine it! Thank you so much!!!! Hey guys! I just wrote this motivation letter for my scholarship application. I have to keep it this short because of the word limit. Could you guys please help me with this letter, and maybe improve it? Thank you so much! :) As a design student who has experience studying in different cultures and interning in several studios, I have always been passionate about design and would like nothing more than to dedicate myself to it. Therefore, I applied for your program and scholarship for the same reason you want me, to create innovative solutions that truly inspire. This scholarship represents to me more than just encouragement, but a motivation that keeps pushing me to achieve the best that I can. I deeply aware that studying at your school is no easy feat, but I am so ready to take new challenges and willing to get my hands dirty, to create something new and different. I believed that the scholarship can help me carve my design career, and I intend to seize this opportunity wholeheartedly. Thank you for taking the time to evaluate this, and hope you have a great day.

Please, Could anyone check this little paragraph for me?? thank you so much! This is part of my motivation letter, although I spent a lot of time writing it, it still seems not quite good, especially the coherence and consistency of the sentence, I sure it will be so much better if you could help me with it, Thanks! The idea of creating something new and different is what drives me, and it seems to me that your program is my next starting point. The more students’ work I saw, the more excited I was, and the more I realized how much I could and need to improve in design. I always remind myself that I am just a toddler in this field, and there is endless for me to learn. But with my skills, understanding, and experiences, I believe I am ready to take my next step in your university I am currently designing an innovative tool for Haier with two designers at IDEO, and it opens my eyes to a professional and collaborative design process. The project requires a large amount of research and Identifying problems, and together we found opportunities and new ideas through many brainstorming and discussions. However, it is much complicated than I thought, we must discuss with Haier back and forth, and it taught me not only about the business side of things like manufacturing and managing costs, but also how to be creative while following the guideline and structural requirement. We are in the 2D-design stage right now, and I am putting skills in good use.

Please, Can anyone check this little paragraph for me?? thanks. This is the last paragraph of my motivation letter, although I spent a lot of time writing it, it still seems not quite good, especially the coherence and consistency of the sentence, I sure it will be so much better if you could help me with it, Thanks! Every experience in the real industry, it’s like an exam to test how well I can do, but also teaches me things I haven’t learned and makes me better recognize my weakness. And when it back to school, it is time for me to improve myself. So, I think design is just an adventure about learning and practicing, and this is exactly the reason I choose your program, because you offered realistic and cooperative projects which is the best and brilliant teaching method to me, and you also encourage students to carry out internships when they are at school. I would certainly live and breath as a designer in your university if it is possible, and I will work my way to become a great designer in the future.

Can anyone check this little paragraph for me?? thanks! This is the last paragraph of my motivation letter, although I spent a lot of time writing it, it still seems not quite good, especially the coherence and consistency of the sentence, I sure it will be so much better if you could help me with it, Thanks!! Every experience in the real industry, it’s like an exam to test how well I can do, but also teaches me things I haven’t learned and makes me better recognize my weakness. And when it back to school, it is time for me to improve myself. So, I think design is just an adventure about learning and practicing, and this is exactly the reason I choose your program, because you offered realistic and cooperative projects which is the best and brilliant teaching method to me, and you also encourage students to carry out internships when they are at school. I would certainly live and breath as a designer in your university if it is possible, and I will work my way to become a great designer in the future.

Writing a intro for my portfolio, is there something I can improve? :) Hey guys, I just wrote this intro about my design portfolio, my focus is on design, and I intended to use my another hobby magic to help this short paragraph. I would be really appreciated if someone could help me check my sentences, and make it much natural and emotional. If there is anything you don't understand, please let me know! Thanks! "As a designer and a close-up magician, I would say that design and magic are quite similar. Both are about creating something new, different, and exciting. However, none of these is easy. Mastering one sleight of hand needs months of practice in front of a mirror, and the more you learn, the harder it was to get even better. but when I create emotion and bring that moment of imagination to my audiences, that laugh with awe and wonder is all need to keep me going. Same as design, and I think we both know that it is an endless adventure with challenges along the way. But when the problems become opportunities, when inspiration comes to mind suddenly, when the marker is drying on the paper, the hot pixel and noise are fading in the rendering software, the product is really being manufactured in the factory, and everything is simply worth it."

Urgent!!!!!Letter of recommendation Letter of recommendation for myself, please help me!!!! thanks!!! Here is a letter of recommendation that my teacher wrote to me recently, and of course, I translated it into English like this. But I want to improve this letter by making some sentences more professional and maybe use more adjective and word group, please help me!! you have my thanks!!! It is my pleasure to recommend H Peng for admission to your University. I met H in a sketching class during his second year of college, after he changed his major from chemistry to industrial design. Therefore, as his teacher, I have witnessed immense progress from an absolute beginner to a creative and hardworking design student. An assignment of the first product sketching course was to finish 100 paper of sketches in 4 weeks. All other students expect H had already taken my fundamental drawing course before, so in that case, it is more difficult for him to finish this task. But throughout the course, I found that his sketching skill improved rapidly, even surpassing many other students. He asked me and classmates for advice very frequently, but also continued drawing during the class break and even after the class, showing determination and ambition. During the next semester, we focused on enhancing students’ marker sketching and give them the same assignment as the one before. H showed very good marker skill in the beginning, meaning that he had conducted a large amount of practice in his spare time before. It also shows that he is willing to devote himself to learning professional skills, and I can’t deny his talent by reviewing his assignment. As far as I know, other teachers also speak highly complimented on his attitude of study and design ability, and I truly believe that he can go much further with his passion and insightful mind for design. It is my strong opinion that H would be the best candidate for you, and she has my highest recommendation. Please feel free to contact me if you have any questions regarding her character or past academic work.

Urgent!!!!!Letter of recommendation for employee Hey, all my language friends! how is everything going! One of my intern(let just call him H) wants me to write him a LOR for his applying of graduate school, and obviously English isn't my native language and I want my letter to sound native and good so that I can help this young man achieve his dream. So now I need you guy's help, It would be fantastic if you could help me with my letter because I know there must be some words or sentences that aren't very clear or wrong and can be improved in another way. I really appreciated your help! H worked in the Design studio in Beijing as an industrial design intern throughout the winter of 2017. As his supervisor and design lead, I arranged him different tasks and worked several projects with him on a daily basis. I was consistently impressed by his initiative, passion, and professionalism. As an industrial designer in the studio, H's responsibilities are just like other other designers, including doing research at the beginning stage of the project, sketching ideas, CAD modeling making and rendering for final presentation. During that time, he fully precipitated in two projects in a period of two months. The first client he encountered was a startup AR company called Pie-Digital, and the goal was to design an AR interaction table. Although he has no experience in designing in real industrial life, he was able to learn things and combine with the knowledge and skills he learned very quickly. He did a very useful research about the client’s demand, restriction, and existing products for the team, and providing plenty of concept sketching for initial product ideation later on. With the help and instructions of mine and a senior designer, he successfully built his own CAD model and was selected by the client out of three design. H gradually became an important member of the ID team and gave 100% effort in the work. He consistently produces a high standard of work and is among one of the most potential interns I have ever worked with. Despite the fact that he had to go back to school in the middle of the second project, he completed his design of a pet ICU unit with the requirement and high detail. As you can tell by now, he is a talented young designer driven by a passion for creating and detail. Therefore, I am proud to say that H would be the ideal candidate for your program. Please feel free to contact me if you need additional information or perspective.