Kseniia
The internet has greatly increased our access to information. To what extent do you think this is a good thing? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. ______________________________ PARAGRAPH II Furthermore, exchanging information contribute to close relations between various individuals with controversial worldviews belonging to different nations and cultures. The modern society has faced with necessity changing toward progressive and advanced civilization. People these days forced to accept distinct realities and to use the Internet to receive intelligence from remote parts of Earth on the way to comprehensive and realizing the actual real life. Psychologists say, that lack of education and awareness often leads to fears, misunderstanding and conflict, and the possession of information contributes to strengthening peace and security.
Feb 20, 2021 7:14 PM
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The internet has greatly increased our access to information. To what extent do you think this is a good thing? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. ______________________________ PARAGRAPH II Furthermore, exchanging information can contribute to closer relations between various individuals from different nations and cultures, people who have different worldviews. Modern society is faced with necessity changing toward progressive and advanced civilization. UNCLEAR " People these days forced to accept distinct realities and to use the Internet to receive intelligence from remote parts of Earth on the way to comprehensive and realizing the actual real life. Psychologists say, that lack of education and awareness often leads to fears, misunderstanding and conflict, and the possession of information contributes to strengthening peace and security. POssible rewrite: The internet is a way for people to find out about and communicate with people from different cultures, people with different world views. Psychologists say that lack of education and awareness often leads to fears, misunderstanding and conflict, and the possession of information contributes to strengthening peace and security. Communication between people of different cultures can foster understanding and (whatever else you want to say it can do)
Instead of 'furthermore" use "Another example of positive uses of the internet" This paragraph is too wordy and unclear. Try to write shorter, clearer sentences.
Feb 20, 2021 8:28 PM
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Kseniia
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English, Russian
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English