There is no a doubt that these days there is no enough time for interesting as well as staying with our family.Even though,all of us have a tiny time for our selves.So,we must make a balance between w

Ahlam

There is no a doubt that these days there is no enough time for interesting as well as staying with our family.Even though,all of us have a tiny time for our selves.So,we must make a balance between work and fun to keep our selves refreshing and break the boredom .Also,when we take a time for fun and relax,we will innovate more thoughts that useful for our jobs.Therefore,l spend my free time to travel to a place which is characterized by wonderful weather and nature or stay at home for relaxing with my family,and watching new movies with each other.

Mar 4, 2021 8:24 PM

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There is no doubt that these days there is not enough time for interests/hobbies or family. Even though, all of us have a tiny amount of time for our selves. So, we must strike a balance between work and fun to keep ourselves refreshed and to break the boredom. Also, when we take time for fun and to relax, we will innovate more thoughts that will be useful for our jobs. Therefore, l spend my free time travelling to a place which is characterized by wonderful weather and nature or staying at home to relax with my family, watching new movies with each other.

I think you could delete the second sentence (“even though” doesn’t quite work here anyway). You could then replace “So” by “However”. 🙂

March 4, 2021

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