Anatasya hurin Fakhi
I'm a middle school student, 8th grade, it's pretty hard to focus studying in this pandemic, plus i personally an ambivert which is i have to studying in group to boost myself, but i make promise to myself that in this 2021 i will improving my English a lot and work hard to get many achivement and certificate, and also to join community. What makes me sad is Education in Indonesia is not that good even before pandemic, i'm completely worry to Student who don't have facility such like Internet data and support from their parents or lost their motivation to studying, School in pandemic need help from many people, it's been a year we studying from home, and of course our knowledge and quality very falling, i hope this pandemic will end soon, so student can studying at school to the fullest
Mar 6, 2021 5:31 AM
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I'm a middle school student, 8th grade, it's pretty hard to focus on studying in this pandemic, plus I personally am an ambivert which means I have to study in a group to motivate myself, but I have made a promise to myself that in 2021 I will improve my English a lot and work hard [to get many achievements and certificates] (1), and that I will also join a community. What makes me sad is that education in Indonesia was not that good even before the pandemic, I’m very worried about students who don't have facilities such as the Internet and support from their parents, or who have lost their motivation to study. During this pandemic, schools have been in need of help from many people, (2) it's been a year of studying from home, and of course our knowledge levels are falling, (3) I hope this pandemic will end soon, so students can study at school to the fullest.
Great work 😊. I’ve changed a few things, however they were all minor issues that I’m sure you’ll iron out over time! It was easy to understand what you meant, and that’s the key thing. (1) You can’t really “get” achievements. You could change this sentence to, for example: “... that in 2021 I will work hard to improve my English a lot and achieve many things” (2) & (3) I would put full stops here and start new sentences. This would separate out your ideas and avoid the last sentence being so long.
March 6, 2021
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