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Can you help me correcting this essay? Thanks a lot! On this day and age, reality shows are on the rise, given that they have a great appeal among viewers. It begs the question of why they are so popular and what brings people to participate in these. The great majority of participants in these programs are people of low educational backgrounds who are trying to achieve easy fame and success. It is often criticised that these programs make celebrities out of ordinary people and glamorise vulgarity and materialism. The reason behind the rapid fame of the participants is mainly due to the fact that many young people follow these programs and idolise those, which lead us to the second point. There is no shortage of studies that shows that teenagers are the main viewers of these programs, followed by unemployed adults. In the first case this is dangerous since people at that age are highly impressionable and, in many cases, look upon participants of these shows as role models and therefore imitate their behaviour, which is, as it is often the case, far from adequate. Many of them even want to follow their steps in the future, participating in these kinds of programs and thus the cycle repeats. There is no denying that reality shows serve a great entertainment purpose, but it is important to bear in mind that they do not show or represent reality and it is not advisable to imitate or take what is portrayed in them as right. Therefore, it is highly recommendable to put an age limit as to the people who can watch the program, so that young people are not influenced by them from such an early age.
Feb 4, 2022 6:49 PM
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Can you help me correcting this essay? Thanks a lot! In this day and age, reality shows have attained greater levels of popularity, seeing as how they have generated a considerable amount of appeal among its viewers. It begs the question of why they are so popular and what exactly it is that motivates people to indulge in the same. The great majority of participants in such shows is composed of those with inadequate educational backgrounds, who are in pursuit of their "fifteen minutes of fame". Such shows are often on the receiving end of heavy criticism for making celebrities out of certain undeserving, publicity-hogging individuals and for glorifying vulgarity and materialism. The reason that reality show participants of the aforementioned kind, become famous rapidly, is that they are often placed on a pedestal by young viewers, and hence, adopted by the same as idols and role models, factors dictating which have been explained below. There is no shortage of studies that show that teenagers are the primary viewers of such shows, followed by unemployed adults, which can prove to be dangerous since young viewers are highly impressionable and hence, regard reality show participants as role models and subsequently, worth imitating. And while it is far from adequate, many young viewers even end up following in the footsteps of their "heroes", to eventually participate in reality shows in the future, becoming a part of a relentless cycle that goes on and on, in the process. There is no denying that reality shows are great sources of entertainment, but it is important to note that they are not representative of the realities of everyday life, and it is not advisable to imitate or take what is portrayed in them, at face value. Therefore, it is highly recommendable to impose an age limit upon those that can watch reality shows, so that young TV viewers are spared being influenced negatively by the same from such an early age.
¡Hola Pandora! A juzgar por tu texto, no pude encontrar muchos errores en lo que has escrito, pero solo he añado algunas sugerencias para que suenes más natural al escribir y hablar en inglés. De hecho, estoy muy feliz de ayudarte con tu inglés incluso en el futuro, porque creo que podemos ser buenos socios lingüísticos, teniendo en cuenta de que me encuentro estudiando para un exámen de español también. Si te interesa un intercambio de idiomas conmigo, estaré encantado de hablar durante 30 minutos en inglés y 30 minutos en español como parte de nuestras futuras videollamadas por Skype, Zoom, Google Meet, lo que prefieras, aunque independientemente de tu interés en hablar conmigo, espero que sigas logrando todas tus metas lingüísticas, te deseo todo lo mejor para tu exámen CAE. ¡Estamos en contacto!
Feb 4, 2022 10:17 PM
Can you help me correcting this essay? Thanks a lot! In this day and age, reality shows are on the rise, given that they have a great appeal among viewers. It begs the question of why they are so popular and what brings people to participate in these. The great majority of participants in these programs are people of low educational backgrounds who are trying to achieve easy fame and success. It is often criticised that these programs make celebrities out of ordinary people and glamorise vulgarity and materialism. The reason behind the rapid fame of the participants is mainly due to the fact that many young people follow these programs and idolise them, which leads us to the second point. There is no shortage of studies that show that teenagers are the main viewers of these programs, followed by unemployed adults. In the first case this is dangerous since people at that age are highly impressionable and, in many cases, look upon participants of these shows as role models and therefore imitate their behaviour, which is, as is often the case, far from adequate. Many of them even want to follow their steps in the future, participating in these kinds of programs and thus the cycle repeats. There is no denying that reality shows serve a great entertainment purpose, but it is important to bear in mind that they do not show or represent reality and it is not advisable to imitate or take what is portrayed in them as right. Therefore, it is highly recommendable to put an age limit as to the people who can watch the program, so that young people are not influenced by them from such an early age.
Hola Pandora. Muy bien. Cuidado con la conjugación de la tercera persona singular con "s" al final. Entonces ¿no eres fan de Telecinco??? Saludos, Simón.
Feb 4, 2022 7:06 PM
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