Yoshi
People in Japan who don't drink increasing these years, especially in the young generation. As you know, if you have been to Japan before, there are a lot of Izakaya. Izakaya is a type of informal Japanese bar that serves alcoholic drinks and snacks. Around a decade ago, the majority of office workers wanted to go there with colleagues after their work, but as they increasing, a person who drinks alone increasing. On the other hand, some people have increased their drinking because they spend more time at home. Certainly, the Opportunity of drinking alcohol is increasing for me under COVID-19 but as I am a drinker I always take care of my quantity of alcohol. Am I sometimes thinking of what about other country's situations? Has the number of people drinking increased or decreased in your country under COVID-19?
Oct 6, 2021 1:34 AM
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The number of people in Japan who don't drink has been increasing in recent years, especially among the younger generation. If you have been to Japan before, you probably know that there are many Izakayas. Izakayas are a type of informal Japanese bar that serves alcoholic drinks and snacks. Around a decade ago, the majority of office workers wanted to go there with colleagues after work, but as they decreased, people who drink alone began to increase. On the other hand, some people have increased their alcohol intake because they spend more time at home. Certainly, the opportunity of drinking alcohol is increasing for me under COVID-19 restrictions, but as I am a responsible drinker, I always watch my quantity of alcohol. Sometimes I think about other country's situations. Has the number of people drinking increased or decreased in your country during COVID-19?
Overall, this is a very well written piece. I enjoyed the topic and a window into Japanese life. The only part I found confusing was the “but as they increased, people who drink alone increasing” part. I think you meant to say “but as they decreased.” Other corrections I made were to make it sound more native. One error I corrected was changing “a lot of Izakaya” to “many izakayas” since bars are countable nouns. Anyway, I hope this helped! And if you’re interested in more help with your writing, feel free to check out my profile and video to see if class with me is a good fit!
Oct 6, 2021 1:58 AM
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Yoshi
Language Skills
Cebuano, Chinese (Mandarin), English, Japanese, Spanish
Learning Language
Cebuano, English